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Task-1

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

1

Source: Ms Shraddha 20-07-23  MT 04

Original Text

The two maps illustrate the pre-construction and past construction of university campus spanning the period between 2010 and the present day.  

Corrected

Corrected version:


No Errors.

Improved

Improved version:

The two maps depict the state of a university campus before and after its construction, covering the timeframe from 2010 to the present. 

2

Original Text

Overall, there is a massive change in university campus: student accommodation, lake, science building, student facilities etc. Without the harm of the nature. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Overall, there has been a massive change in the university campus, including student accommodation, a lake, a science building, and student facilities, all without harming the environment.

Explanation: 


The verb "has been" should be used instead of "is" to indicate that the change has occurred over a period of time. Additionally, "including" is a more appropriate word choice than "such as" to introduce the examples.

Improved

Improved version:

The university campus has undergone a significant transformation, encompassing the addition of student accommodation, a lake, a science building, and student facilities, all while prioritizing environmental preservation. 

3

Original Text

Turning to an unchanged area, in 2010 there was a lake in the centre of University. In the East side, there were shops and behind there was a restaurant. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Turning to an unchanged area, in 2010 there was a lake in the centre of the university. On the east side, there were shops, and behind them, there was a restaurant.


Explanation: 


"University" should be capitalized as it refers to a specific institution. "On" is a more appropriate word choice than "in" to indicate the location of the shops. The pronoun "them" is used to refer back to the plural noun "shops."

Improved

Improved version:

In terms of unchanged areas, in 2010 there was a central lake within the university grounds. On the eastern side, there were shops, with a restaurant located behind them. 

4

Original Text

In the North side, university office was there, and opposite to University office teaching block(arts and science) were there. Crossing the road student accommodation came. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

On the north side, there was a university office, and opposite the university office, there was a teaching block for arts and science. Across the road, there was student accommodation.


Explanation: 

"On" is a more appropriate word choice than "in" to indicate the location of the university office. The phrase "teaching block" should be preceded by the article "a" to indicate that there is only one block. The phrase "for arts and science" clarifies the purpose of the teaching block. The phrase "across the road" is used to indicate the location of the student accommodation.

Improved

Improved version:

The northern side housed the university office, while opposite this was a teaching block for arts and sciences. Student accommodation was situated across the road. 

5

Original Text

Turning to pre-constructed area, teaching block is reconstructed and make separate science building and arts building. In the North side, University offices are replaced with science building." 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Turning to the pre-constructed area, the teaching block was reconstructed to create separate science and arts buildings. On the north side, the university offices were replaced with a science building.


Explanation: 


The phrase "the pre-constructed area" is used to refer to the area that was already built before the changes. The verb "was" is used instead of "is" to indicate that the reconstruction occurred in the past. The phrase "to create" is added to clarify the purpose of the reconstruction. The word "and" is used to separate the two separate buildings. The phrase "a science building" is used instead of "science building" to indicate that there is only one building. 

Improved

Improved version:

Moving on to the pre-constructed area, the teaching block underwent reconstruction, resulting in the creation of separate science and arts buildings. In the north, the university offices were replaced by a science building. 

6

Original Text

Student accommodation in south side is replaced in westside. One student accommodation are still there in the west side. Lawn and seating area is removed. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The student accommodation on the south side was replaced with accommodation on the west side. One student accommodation is still there on the west side. The lawn and seating area were removed. 


Explanation: 


The student accommodation" is used instead of "student accommodation" to indicate that specific accommodations are being referred to. "On" is used instead of "in" to indicate the location of the accommodations. The verb "was" is used instead of "is" to indicate that the replacement occurred in the past. "One student accommodation" is used instead of "one student accommodation" to indicate that there is only one. The verb "were" is used instead of "is" to indicate that the removal of the lawn and seating area occurred in the past.

Improved

Improved version:

Student accommodation on the south side was relocated to the west, with one remaining student accommodation facility still present. The lawn and seating area were removed. 

Source: Ms Shraddha 20-07-23  MT 04

Original Text!

     The two maps illustrate the pre-construction and past construction of university campus spanning the period between 2010 and the present day. 

Overall, there is a massive change in university campus: student accommodation, lake, science building, student facilities etc. Without the harm of the nature. 

Turning to an unchanged area, in 2010 there was a lake in the centre of University. In the East side, there were shops and behind there was a restaurant. In the North side, university office was there, and opposite to University office teaching block(arts and science) were there. Crossing the road student accommodation came. 

Turning to pre-constructed area, teaching block is reconstructed and make separate science building and arts building. In the North side, University offices are replaced with science building. Student accommodation in south side is replaced in westside. One student accommodation are still there in the west side. Lawn and seating area is removed. Shops in east side are remover and make student accommodation. Furthermore, in south side, built student facilities like shop offices etc.

Corrected!

  The two maps illustrate the pre-construction and past construction of a university campus spanning the period between 2010 and the present day. Overall, there has been a massive change in the university campus, including student accommodation, a lake, a science building, and student facilities, without harming the natural environment.

Turning to the unchanged area, in 2010 there was a lake in the center of the university. On the east side, there were shops, and behind them was a restaurant. On the north side, the university office was located, and opposite to it were the teaching blocks for arts and science. Crossing the road, student accommodation was situated.

Turning to the pre-constructed area, the teaching block was reconstructed to create separate buildings for science and arts. On the north side, the university offices were replaced with a science building. Student accommodation on the south side was replaced by new buildings on the west side, although one student accommodation building still remains in the west. The lawn and seating area were removed. The shops on the east side were also removed and replaced with student accommodation. Furthermore, student facilities such as shop offices were built on the south side.

IMPROVED VERSION

The two maps depict the state of a university campus before and after its construction, covering the timeframe from 2010 to the present. The university campus has undergone a significant transformation, encompassing the addition of student accommodation, a lake, a science building, and student facilities, all while prioritizing environmental preservation. 


In terms of unchanged areas, in 2010 there was a central lake within the university grounds. On the eastern side, there were shops, with a restaurant located behind them. The northern side housed the university office, while opposite this was a teaching block for arts and sciences. Student accommodation was situated across the road. Moving on to the pre-constructed area, the teaching block underwent reconstruction, resulting in the creation of separate science and arts buildings. In the north, the university offices were replaced by a science building. Student accommodation on the south side was relocated to the west, with one remaining student accommodation facility still present. The lawn and seating area were removed. Overall, these changes have greatly transformed the university campus, providing enhanced facilities for students without compromising the natural environment.

Key Phrases and Vocabulary