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Task-1

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

1

Source: Ms Shraddha 22-08-23  MT 17

Original Text

The map illustrates the pre construction and after construction of an island.

Corrected

Corrected version:

 The map illustrates the pre-construction and post-construction phases of an island.

Explanation: 

 "Pre construction" and "after construction" should be hyphenated as compound adjectives. "After construction" is also replaced with "post-construction" for clarity and proper usage.

Improved

Improved version:

The map delineates the transformation of an island before and after construction. 

2

Original Text

Overall, the island has witnessed the massive changes such as restaurant, reception, accommodation, beach, swimming and pier without harming the environment.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Overall, the island has undergone significant changes, including the addition of a restaurant, reception area, accommodations, beach, swimming area, and pier, all of which were implemented without harming the environment. 


Explanation: 

Improved the sentence structure and replaced "massive changes such as" with "undergone significant changes, including" for clarity and proper expression. Also, added "area" after "swimming" and rephrased the sentence for clarity.

Improved

Improved version:

The island has undergone substantial changes, introducing a restaurant, reception area, accommodations, beach, swimming section, and pier, all while preserving the environment. 

3

Original Text

 In the past, beach was there in the west side and large number of coconut trees were there. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In the past, a beach was present on the western side, accompanied by a large number of coconut trees. 

Explanation: 


 Added the article "a" before "beach," changed "was there" to "was present," and rephrased "in the west side" to "on the western side" for proper expression. Also, corrected the subject-verb agreement in "large number of coconut trees were there."

Improved

Improved version:

Historically, the western side featured a beach adorned with a plethora of coconut trees. 

4

Original Text

Turning to the after the construction of the island, there was a massive changes in the island. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Turning to the changes after the island's construction, significant alterations were made. 


Explanation:

Removed the extra "the" before "after the construction" and rephrased the sentence for clarity and conciseness. Changed "massive changes" to "significant alterations." 

Improved

Improved version:

Following construction, the island experienced a remarkable metamorphosis. 

5

Original Text

Firstly, restaurant was built in north side, behind the restaurant, reception was developed and made vehicle track for individuals. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Firstly, a restaurant was constructed on the northern side. Behind the restaurant, a reception area was developed, and a vehicle track was established for transportation. 


Explanation: 


 Added the article "a" before "restaurant." Corrected "in north side" to "on the northern side." Split the sentence into two for clarity and proper expression.

Improved

Improved version:

 Notably, a restaurant emerged on the northern edge, accompanied by a reception area. Moreover, a vehicular track was established. 

6

Original Text

However, beach was still there in the west side. Footpath was made like a roundbound and behind the houses were constructed. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

However, the beach remained on the western side. A footpath resembling a circuit was created, and houses were constructed behind it. 

Explanation:

Added "the" before "beach." Corrected "west side" to "western side." Replaced "roundbound" with "resembling a circuit" for clarity. Corrected the sentence structure in the second part for proper expression. 

Improved

Improved version:

Nevertheless, the western beach endured, while a circuit-like footpath emerged, flanked by newly constructed houses.

7

Original Text

Furthermore, three houses were built in South-West side. Moreover, footpath constructed the same as the northeast side. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Furthermore, three houses were built on the south-western side. Moreover, a footpath was constructed mirroring the one on the northeast side. 


Explanation: 


Corrected "South-West side" to "south-western side." Added "on the" before "south-western side" for proper expression. Rephrased "footpath constructed the same as" to "a footpath was constructed mirroring." 

Improved

Improved version:

Additionally, three residences were erected on the south-western edge, mirroring a footpath akin to the northeast. 

8

Original Text

Pier was built in south side and these pier was attached to the vehicle track. Two boats were there. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

A pier was constructed on the southern side, and it was connected to the vehicle track. Two boats were present.


Explanation: 


Added "A" before "pier." Corrected "in south side" to "on the southern side." Replaced "these pier" with "it" for proper reference. Added "present" after "Two boats" for clarity. 

Improved

Improved version:

Notably, a pier was established on the southern coast, integrated with the vehicular track, housing two boats. 

9

Original Text

In conclusion, it can be seen that before construction trees were there and after reconstruction trees were still there without the affecting of the environment. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In conclusion, it is evident that trees were present before the construction phase, and even after reconstruction, the trees remain without causing any adverse effects on the environment.


Explanation: 


Replaced "it can be seen" with "it is evident that." Rephrased "before construction trees were there" to "trees were present before the construction phase." Corrected "the affecting" to "affecting" and rephrased the sentence for clarity and proper expression. 

Improved

Improved version:

In summation, it is evident that trees existed prior to construction and persisted post-reconstruction, maintaining their presence without negatively impacting the environment. 

Source: Ms Shraddha 22-08-23  MT 17

Original Text!

The map illustrates the pre construction and after construction of an island. 

Overall, the island has witnessed the massive changes such as restaurant, reception, accommodation, beach, swimming and pier without harming the environment. 

In the past, beach was there in the west side and large number of coconut trees were there. 

Turning to the after the construction of the island, there was a massive changes in the island. Firstly, restaurant was built in north side, behind the restaurant, reception was developed and made vehicle track for individuals. 

However, beach was still there in the west side. Footpath was made like a roundbound and behind the houses were constructed. 

Furthermore, three houses were built in South-West side. Moreover, footpath constructed the same as the northeast side.

Pier was built in south side and these pier was attached to the vehicle track. Two boats were there. 

In conclusion, it can be seen that before construction trees were there and after reconstruction trees were still there without the affecting of the environment.

Corrected!

The map illustrates the pre-construction and post-construction of an island. Overall, the island has witnessed massive changes such as the addition of a restaurant, reception area, accommodations, beach, swimming area, and pier, all without harming the environment.

In the past, there was a beach on the west side with a large number of coconut trees.

Turning to the after-construction phase of the island, there were significant changes. Firstly, a restaurant was built on the north side, and behind the restaurant, a reception area was developed, along with a vehicle track for individuals.

However, the beach still remained on the west side. A footpath was created in a circular pattern, and houses were constructed behind it.

Furthermore, three houses were built on the southwest side. Additionally, a footpath was constructed in the same manner as the northeast side.

A pier was built on the south side, and this pier was connected to the vehicle track. Two boats were present.

In summary, it can be seen that before the construction, there were trees, and after the reconstruction, trees still remained without any negative impact on the environment. 

IMPROVED VERSION

The provided map illustrates the transformation of an island through distinct phases - before and after construction.It is evident that the island has undergone significant changes, introducing diverse amenities such as a restaurant, reception area, accommodations, beach, swimming section, and pier. Remarkably, these changes were implemented without compromising the natural environment.

 In the historical context, the western side of the island featured a prominent beach area, adorned with an abundant presence of coconut trees.Upon closer examination of the post-construction scenario, the island exhibited a remarkable transformation. Notably, a restaurant was established on the northern edge, accompanied by the creation of a reception area. Furthermore, the development of a dedicated vehicular track added to the infrastructure.

However, the pristine beach on the western side remained unaltered. Simultaneously, a curvilinear footpath was introduced, paralleled by the construction of new residential houses.Further Additions and Enhancements: An intriguing aspect lies in the construction of three residences on the south-western periphery, mirroring a footpath arrangement akin to that found on the northeast side.

Inclusion of Waterfront Infrastructure: Of particular significance is the establishment of a pier on the southern coast, seamlessly integrated with the existing vehicular track. This feature was further complemented by the presence of two boats.

In summation, the provided map showcases the evolution of the island, where existing trees not only persisted through construction but also continued to thrive post-reconstruction, contributing to the preservation of the island's environmental equilibrium.

Key Phrases and Vocabulary

Introduction:

Overview:

Description of the Initial State:

Details of the Changes Post-construction:

Continuation of the Changes:

Further Additions and Enhancements:

Inclusion of Waterfront Infrastructure:

Summary: