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Task-2

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Mr Damanpreet Singh 27-06-23 MT 9

Original Text

In many ways, world's people would not be same without healthy body. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In many ways, the world's people would not be the same without a healthy body. 

Explanation:  


Added the article "a" before "healthy body" to make the sentence grammatically correct.

Improved

Improved version:

In many ways, people around the world would not be the same without a healthy body. 

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Original Text

In 21 century most of people are overweight, this situation, includes so many health problems. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In the 21st century, most people are overweight. This situation includes so many health problems.

Explanation: 

Added the article "the" before "21st century" to indicate a specific century. Removed the comma after "overweight" to correct the sentence structure. 

Improved

Improved version:

In the 21st century, the majority of people are overweight, which leads to numerous health problems. 

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Original Text

Overall, today more people are overweight than before because todays' life is very fast and complicated. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Overall, today more people are overweight than before because today's life is very fast and complicated. 


Explanation: 


Corrected the use of the apostrophe in "today's" to indicate possession.

Improved

Improved version:

Overall, in today's fast-paced and complex life, a greater number of people are overweight compared to the past. 

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Original Text

Meanwhile, many people focus towards there work and skip to give a healthy diet to there body." 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Meanwhile, many people focus on their work and skip giving a healthy diet to their bodies. 

Explanation: 

Replaced "towards" with "on" to show the correct preposition. Replaced "there" with "their" to indicate possession.

Improved

Improved version:

Meanwhile, many individuals prioritize their work and neglect to maintain a healthy diet. 

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Original Text

Moreover, they don’t do any sort of exercise which leads to unhealthy body and many health problems like asthma, people who are working they prefer to eat "fast food" which comes with one advantage and many disadvantages like it is a tasty and take less time to get ready. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Moreover, they don't do any sort of exercise, which leads to an unhealthy body and many health problems like asthma. People who are working prefer to eat "fast food," which comes with one advantage and many disadvantages. It is tasty and takes less time to get ready.

 

Explanation: 


Split the sentence into two parts for clarity. Added a comma after "exercise" to separate the clauses. Added a comma after "asthma" to separate the clauses. Replaced the double quotes around "fast food" with single quotes for consistency. Added a period after "disadvantages" to create a new sentence. Capitalized the first letter of the sentence after the quotation marks. 

Improved

Improved version:

Moreover, lack of exercise contributes to an unhealthy body and various health issues, such as asthma. Additionally, individuals who work often opt for "fast food," which has one advantage but numerous disadvantages. It is both delicious and convenient. 

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Original Text

Whereas, have many disadvantages like junk food is the main reason for overnight and health problems it is full of fat and calories. 

Corrected

Corrected version

Whereas, it has many disadvantages. Junk food is the main reason for overweight and health problems as it is full of fat and calories.


Explanation: 


Changed "have" to "it has" for clarity and sentence structure. Replaced "overnight" with "overweight" to convey the intended meaning.

Improved

Improved version:

Furthermore, junk food has several disadvantages, as it is a significant factor behind overweight issues and associated health problems due to its high fat and calorie content. 

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Original Text

Overweight problem can cause many health disease like asthma, cancer ,high bp. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The overweight problem can cause many health diseases like asthma, cancer, and high blood pressure. 

Explanation: 


Added the definite article "the" before "overweight problem" for clarity. Added commas to separate the listed health diseases.

Improved

Improved version:

The issue of being overweight can lead to various health conditions, including asthma, cancer, and high blood pressure. 

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Original Text

Another reason for this problem is technology like vehicle and phones etc. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Another reason for this problem is technology like vehicles and phones, etc. 


Explanation: 


The repetition of the word "newspaper" is unnecessary and should be removed. The sentence will convey the intended meaning without it.

Improved

Improved version:

Another contributing factor to this problem is the prevalence of technology, such as vehicles and phones, which have become more common in recent times. 

Source: Mr Damanpreet Singh 27-06-23 MT 9

Original Text!

In many ways, world's people would not be same without healthy body. In 21 century most of people are overweight, this situation, includes so many health problems.


Overall, today more people are overweight than before because today’s life is very fast and complicated. Meanwhile, many people focus towards there work and skip to give a healthy diet to there body .Moreover, they don’t do any sort of exercise which leads to unhealthy body and many health problems like asthma, people who are working they prefer to eat "fast food" which comes with one advantage and many disadvantages like it is a

 tasty and take less time to get ready. Whereas, have many disadvantages like junk food is the main reason for overnight and health problems it is full of fat and calories.


Overweight problem can cause many health disease like asthma, cancer ,high bp. Another reason for this problem is technology like vehicle and phones etc. old time people prefer to travel by  foot or cycle which burn there calories and fat, but nowadays people have bikes and cars to do travelling. Moreover, at that time people like to eat traditional Food, but at present time most of the people in India eat western food which is full of fat and calories.


To commence with, overweight people should follow a strict routine to make there body fit and try to avoid unhealthy food . Government can also deliver some lectures towards the benefit of healthy body and demerits of unhealthy food.

Corrected!

In many ways, people around the world would not be the same without a healthy body. In the 21st century, most people are overweight. This situation includes so many health problems. 


Overall, today more people are overweight than before because today's life is very fast and complicated. Meanwhile, many people focus on their work and skip giving a healthy diet to their bodies. Moreover, they don't do any sort of exercise, which leads to an unhealthy body and many health problems like asthma. People who are working prefer to eat "fast food," which comes with one advantage and many disadvantages. It is tasty and takes less time to get ready. However, it has many disadvantages. Junk food is the main reason for overweight and health problems as it is full of fat and calories. 


The overweight problem can cause many health diseases like asthma, cancer, and high blood pressure. Another reason for this problem is technology like vehicles and phones, etc. In the old times, people preferred to travel by foot or cycle, which burned their calories and fat. But nowadays, people have bikes and cars for traveling. Moreover, at that time, people liked to eat traditional food, but at present, most people in India eat Western food, which is full of fat and calories. 


To commence with, overweight people should follow a strict routine to make their bodies fit and try to avoid unhealthy food. The government can also deliver lectures on the benefits of a healthy body and the demerits of unhealthy food.

IMPROVED VERSION

          In today's world, the importance of maintaining a healthy body cannot be overstated. The 21st century has witnessed a significant rise in the number of people who are overweight, leading to a plethora of health issues. This phenomenon can be attributed to the fast-paced and complex nature of modern life, where individuals often prioritize their work over their well-being.


           A sedentary lifestyle and a lack of physical exercise are key contributing factors to the prevailing issue of overweight individuals. Many people neglect to incorporate regular exercise into their daily routine, which inevitably results in an unhealthy body. Furthermore, the prevalence of "fast food" among those who work exacerbates the problem. While such food options offer convenience and palatability, they come with a multitude of disadvantages due to their high fat and calorie content.


           The consequences of being overweight are far-reaching and can manifest in various health conditions. For instance, asthma, cancer, and high blood pressure are commonly associated with excess weight. It is evident that this issue is further exacerbated by technological advancements, such as the increased reliance on vehicles and smartphones. In the past, people preferred to engage in physical activities like walking or cycling, which helped them burn calories and maintain a healthier lifestyle. However, the present era witnesses a shift towards a more sedentary way of life, where the convenience of bikes and cars has replaced the need for physical exertion.

To address this escalating problem, it is imperative for overweight individuals to adhere to a strict regimen that promotes physical fitness and a balanced diet. Governments and health organizations can play a crucial role by providing informative lectures and campaigns highlighting the benefits of a healthy body and the detrimental effects of consuming unhealthy food.


              In conclusion, the increasing prevalence of overweight individuals in today's society stems from the rapid pace and complexity of modern life. Unhealthy dietary choices and a lack of physical activity contribute to this issue, which in turn leads to various health conditions. Efforts should be made at both the individual and societal levels to promote the significance of a healthy body and to combat the adverse effects of unhealthy food consumption.

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