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Task-2
Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes
Common Errors
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Source: Ms Shraddha 19-07-23 MT 05
Original Text
In many ways, crime rates are increasing day by day as social media is the main cause of crime, but this can be dealt with by promoting various rules and regulations.
Corrected
Corrected version:
No errors.
Improved
Improved version:
The rise in crime rates is mostly attributable to the prevalence of social media; however, the problem may be mitigated by the implementation of new restrictions.
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Original Text
Nowadays, crime rates are increasing because police are not aware about crimes as they ignored criminal and criminals do more crimes.
Corrected
Corrected version:
Nowadays, crime rates are increasing because police are not aware of crimes as they ignore criminals and criminals continue to commit more crimes.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains several grammatical errors. The phrase "police are not aware about crimes" should be "police are not aware of crimes." Additionally, the phrase "they ignored criminal" should be "they ignore criminals" to maintain subject-verb agreement. Lastly, the phrase "criminals do more crimes" should be "criminals continue to commit more crimes" for clarity and proper verb tense.
Improved
Improved version:
Nowadays, crime rates are on the rise due to police negligence and criminals taking advantage of the situation. To address this issue, it is crucial to enhance police awareness and responsiveness towards criminal activities.
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Original Text
A significant number of police are took many charges for people to find criminals.
Corrected
Corrected version:
A significant number of police take on many responsibilities to find criminals.
Explanation:
The original sentence is grammatically incorrect. The phrase "are took many charges" should be "take on many responsibilities" to convey the idea that police officers have a lot of tasks or duties in order to find criminals.
Improved
Improved version:
A significant number of police officers are burdened with multiple responsibilities in their pursuit of criminals. However, there is a need for better coordination and allocation of resources to ensure effective crime prevention and detection.
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Original Text
Furthermore, social media plays a vital role in people's lives.
Corrected
Corrected version:
The sentence is grammatically correct and does not require any changes.
Improved
Improved version:
Furthermore, social media plays a pivotal role in people's lives, serving as a powerful platform for communication and information sharing. However, it is important to acknowledge that social media can also be misused for criminal activities, such as spreading false information or inciting violence.
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Original Text
As people are watching movies or films. In movies and films, they show many robbery, crimes. In this way, people attract and they learn from movies.
Corrected
Corrected version:
As people watch movies or films. In movies and films, they show many robberies and crimes. In this way, people are attracted and they learn from movies.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains an unnecessary use of the present continuous tense. The phrase "are watching" should be changed to "watch" to convey the same meaning in a simpler way. The original sentence contains a grammatical error. The word "robbery" should be pluralized to "robberies" to match the plural form of "crimes. "The original sentence is grammatically incorrect. The word "attract" should be in the passive form, "are attracted," to match the subject-verb agreement. \
Improved
Improved version:
As individuals watch movies, they are exposed to various portrayals of robbery and crimes. While entertainment is a legitimate aspect of films, it is crucial to ensure that the content does not glorify or promote criminal behavior. Stricter regulations and guidelines for the film industry can help mitigate the negative influence of movies on crime rates.
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Original Text
A great many youngsters are watching films and this become the bad effect on youth as they do not understand the right thing. They want to do the same thing as they find that it was entertaining for them, but this may cause many serious problems.
Corrected
Corrected version:
A great many youngsters are watching films, and this has a negative effect on youth as they do not understand what is right. They want to do the same thing as they find it entertaining, but this may cause many serious problems.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains several grammatical errors. The phrase "this become the bad effect" should be "this has a negative effect." Additionally, the phrase "on youth as they do not understand the right thing" should be "on youth as they do not understand what is right" for clarity and proper phrasing.
Improved
Improved version:
A significant number of young people watch films, which can have a detrimental effect on their understanding of what is right and wrong. It is essential to educate young individuals about the distinction between fiction and reality and promote critical thinking skills to prevent them from imitating criminal behavior.
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Original Text
Moreover, crime rates may also increase by the internet.
Corrected
Corrected version:
Moreover, crime rates may also increase through the internet.
Explanation:
Repetition of "newspaper" and incorrect word order.
Improved
Improved version:
Moreover, crime rates may also increase through the internet, as it provides a platform for various criminal activities, such as cybercrime and online fraud. Strengthening cybersecurity measures and promoting digital literacy can help combat these emerging threats.
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Original Text
On the internet, many website shows technique to rob.
Corrected
Corrected version:
On the internet, many websites show techniques for robbery.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains a grammatical error. The word "website" should be pluralized to "websites" to match the plural form of "shows." Additionally, the phrase "technique to rob" should be "techniques for robbery" to convey the idea that the websites provide information on different methods of committing robbery.
Improved
Improved version:
On the internet, numerous websites showcase techniques for robbery. It is crucial to enhance online surveillance and take strict actions against websites that promote criminal activities. Additionally, educating the public about online safety and responsible internet usage can help prevent individuals from engaging in criminal behavior.
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Original Text
In this way people are attracted by these things because in some countries people do not follow rules and regulations.
Corrected
Corrected version:
In this way, people are attracted to these things because in some countries, people do not follow rules and regulations.
Explanation:
The original sentence is grammatically correct, but it lacks proper punctuation. The phrase "In this way" should be followed by a comma to separate it from the rest of the sentence.
Improved
Improved version:
In this regard, people are attracted to these criminal activities due to the lack of adherence to rules and regulations in certain countries. Strengthening law enforcement and promoting a culture of compliance with rules and regulations is of utmost importance. Public awareness campaigns and strict penalties for non-compliance can help deter individuals from engaging in criminal activities.
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Original Text
Turning to possible solutions, starting various campaign to fight with criminals as it may help people to safe themselves.
Corrected
Corrected version:
Turning to possible solutions, starting various campaigns to fight criminals may help people to keep themselves safe.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains several grammatical errors. The phrase "starting various campaign" should be "starting various campaigns" to match the plural form of "campaigns." Additionally, the phrase "to fight with criminals" should be "to fight criminals" for clarity. Lastly, the phrase "help people to safe themselves" should be "help people to keep themselves safe" for proper phrasing.
Improved
Improved version:
Turning to possible solutions, initiating various campaigns to combat criminals can help ensure people's safety. These campaigns can involve community engagement, public awareness programs, and collaboration between law enforcement agencies and the public. By working together, society can create a safer environment for everyone.
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Original Text
Give trainings to women as they are not aware about criminal rates.
Corrected
Corrected version:
Provide training to women as they are not aware of crime rates.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains a grammatical error. The phrase "Give trainings to women" should be "Provide training to women" for proper phrasing. Additionally, the phrase "as they are not aware about criminal rates" should be "as they are not aware of crime rates" to convey the idea that women lack knowledge about crime rates.
Improved
Improved version:
Empowering women with self-defense skills and knowledge about crime prevention is crucial, as they may not be fully aware of crime rates. Providing training to women can help them protect themselves and contribute to a safer society.
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Original Text
In rural areas, where crime rates are high, may use cameras in those areas where police cannot come on time.
Corrected
Corrected version:
In rural areas, where crime rates are high, cameras may be used in those areas where police cannot arrive on time.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains several grammatical errors. The phrase "may use cameras" should be "cameras may be used" to convey a passive construction. Additionally, the phrase "where police cannot come on time" should be "where police cannot arrive on time" for clarity and proper verb usage.
Improved
Improved version:
In rural areas with high crime rates, the use of cameras in areas where police response time is delayed can be beneficial. Installing surveillance cameras can act as a deterrent to criminals and provide crucial evidence for investigations. Additionally, improving communication and response systems in rural areas is essential to ensure prompt police intervention.
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Original Text
Start the high taxes on guns and increase the price of these things, in these way fewer people buy these things.
Corrected
Corrected version:
Implement higher taxes on guns and increase their prices, resulting in fewer people purchasing them.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains several grammatical errors. The phrase "Start the high taxes" should be "Implement higher taxes" for proper phrasing. Additionally, the phrase "increase the price of these things" should be "increase their prices" to avoid repetition and maintain clarity. Lastly, the phrase "in these way fewer people buy these things" should be "resulting in fewer people purchasing them" for clarity and proper verb usage.
Improved
Improved version:
Implementing higher taxes on guns and increasing their prices can potentially reduce the availability of firearms and decrease the likelihood of gun-related crimes. Additionally, strict regulations on gun ownership and enhanced background checks can further contribute to public safety.
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Original Text
In summary, using a social media may cause crimes and children do the same thing as they do not understand about the right thing, reducing the age limit to watch films as it may reduce the crime rates.
Corrected
Corrected version:
In summary, the use of social media may contribute to crimes, and children may imitate these actions due to their lack of understanding. Reducing the age limit to watch films may help reduce crime rates.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains several grammatical errors. The phrase "using a social media" should be "the use of social media" for proper phrasing. Additionally, the phrase "children do the same thing as they do not understand about the right thing" should be "children may imitate these actions due to their lack of understanding" to convey the idea that children imitate crimes without understanding their consequences. Lastly, the phrase "reducing the age limit to watch films as it may reduce the crime rates" should be "reducing the age limit to watch films may help reduce crime rates" for clarity and proper verb usage.
Improved
Improved version:
In summary, the use of social media can contribute to crimes, and children may imitate these actions due to their lack of understanding. Reducing the age limit to watch films may help reduce crime rates. However, it is essential to address the root causes of crime, such as improving police awareness and responsiveness, promoting responsible internet usage, and strengthening law enforcement efforts. By implementing these measures, society can work towards creating a safer and more secure environment for everyone.
Source: Ms Shraddha 19-07-23 MT 05
Original Text!
In many ways, crime rates are increasing day by day as social media is the main cause of crime, but this can be dealt with by promoting various rules and regulations.
Nowadays, crime rates are increasing because police are not aware about crimes as they ignored criminal and criminals do more crimes. A significant number of police are took many charges for people to find criminals. Furthermore, social media plays a vital role in people's lives. As people are watching movies or films. In movies and films, they show many robbery, crimes.
In this way, people attract and they learn from movies. A great many youngsters are watching films and this become the bad effect on youth as they do not understand the right thing. They want to do the same thing as they find that it was entertaining for them, but this may cause many serious problems. Moreover, crime rates may also increase by the internet. On the internet, many website shows technique to rob. In this way people are attracted by these things because in some countries people do not follow rules and regulations.
Turning to possible solutions, starting various campaign to fight with criminals as it may help people to safe themselves. Give trainings to women as they are not aware about criminal rates. In rural areas, where crime rates are high, may use cameras in those areas where police cannot come on time. Start the high taxes on guns and increase the price of these things, in these way fewer people buy these things.
In summary, using a social media may cause crimes and children do the same thing as they do not understand about the right thing, reducing the age limit to watch films as it may reduce the crime rates.
Corrected!
In many ways, crime rates are increasing day by day, and social media is the main cause of this. However, this can be dealt with by promoting various rules and regulations.
Nowadays, crime rates are increasing because the police are not aware of crimes as they ignore criminals, leading to more crimes. A significant number of police officers have taken on too many responsibilities, making it difficult for them to find criminals. Furthermore, social media plays a vital role in people's lives. As people watch movies or films, they are exposed to many robberies and crimes.
This attracts people and they learn from these movies. Many young people watch films, which has a negative effect on them as they fail to understand what is right. They want to mimic what they see in movies because they find it entertaining, but this can lead to serious problems. Moreover, crime rates may also increase due to the internet. On the internet, many websites show techniques for robbing. People are attracted to these things because in some countries, people do not follow rules and regulations.
Turning to possible solutions, various campaigns should be started to fight against criminals as it may help people to keep themselves safe. Trainings should be given to women as they are often not aware of crime rates. In rural areas, where crime rates are high, cameras can be used in areas where the police cannot respond in time. Additionally, imposing high taxes on guns and increasing their prices may discourage people from buying them.
In summary, the use of social media may contribute to an increase in crimes, especially when children imitate what they see without understanding what is right. Reducing the age limit to watch certain films may help reduce crime rates.
IMPROVED VERSION
The rise in crime rates is mostly attributable to the prevalence of social media; however, the problem may be mitigated by the implementation of new restrictions.
Nowadays, crime rates are on the rise due to police negligence and criminals taking advantage of the situation. To address this issue, it is crucial to enhance police awareness and responsiveness towards criminal activities.
A significant number of police officers are burdened with multiple responsibilities in their pursuit of criminals. However, there is a need for better coordination and allocation of resources to ensure effective crime prevention and detection. Furthermore, social media plays a pivotal role in people's lives, serving as a powerful platform for communication and information sharing. However, it is important to acknowledge that social media can also be misused for criminal activities, such as spreading false information or inciting violence. As individuals watch movies, they are exposed to various portrayals of robbery and crimes. While entertainment is a legitimate aspect of films, it is crucial to ensure that the content does not glorify or promote criminal behavior. Stricter regulations and guidelines for the film industry can help mitigate the negative influence of movies on crime rates.
A significant number of young people watch films, which can have a detrimental effect on their understanding of what is right and wrong. It is essential to educate young individuals about the distinction between fiction and reality and promote critical thinking skills to prevent them from imitating criminal behavior.
Moreover, crime rates may also increase through the internet, as it provides a platform for various criminal activities, such as cybercrime and online fraud. Strengthening cybersecurity measures and promoting digital literacy can help combat these emerging threats. On the internet, numerous websites showcase techniques for robbery. It is crucial to enhance online surveillance and take strict actions against websites that promote criminal activities. Additionally, educating the public about online safety and responsible internet usage can help prevent individuals from engaging in criminal behavior. In this regard, people are attracted to these criminal activities due to the lack of adherence to rules and regulations in certain countries. Strengthening law enforcement and promoting a culture of compliance with rules and regulations is of utmost importance. Public awareness campaigns and strict penalties for non-compliance can help deter individuals from engaging in criminal activities.
Turning to possible solutions, initiating various campaigns to combat criminals can help ensure people's safety. These campaigns can involve community engagement, public awareness programs, and collaboration between law enforcement agencies and the public. By working together, society can create a safer environment for everyone. Empowering women with self-defense skills and knowledge about crime prevention is crucial, as they may not be fully aware of crime rates. Providing training to women can help them protect themselves and contribute to a safer society. In rural areas with high crime rates, the use of cameras in areas where police response time is delayed can be beneficial. Installing surveillance cameras can act as a deterrent to criminals and provide crucial evidence for investigations. Additionally, improving communication and response systems in rural areas is essential to ensure prompt police intervention. Implementing higher taxes on guns and increasing their prices can potentially reduce the availability of firearms and decrease the likelihood of gun-related crimes. Additionally, strict regulations on gun ownership and enhanced background checks can further contribute to public safety.
In summary, the use of social media can contribute to crimes, and children may imitate these actions due to their lack of understanding. Reducing the age limit to watch films may help reduce crime rates. However, it is essential to address the root causes of crime, such as improving police awareness and responsiveness, promoting responsible internet usage, and strengthening law enforcement efforts. By implementing these measures, society can work towards creating a safer and more secure environment for everyone.
Key Phrases:
Crime rates
Police negligence
Criminal activities
Police awareness and responsiveness
Coordination and allocation of resources
Social media
Misuse of social media
Spreading false information
Inciting violence
Portrayals of robbery and crimes in movies
Stricter regulations and guidelines for the film industry
Influence of movies on crime rates
Educating young individuals
Distinguishing fiction from reality
Critical thinking skills
Internet and criminal activities
Cybercrime and online fraud
Strengthening cybersecurity measures
Digital literacy
Websites showcasing techniques for robbery
Online surveillance
Adherence to rules and regulations
Public awareness campaigns
Empowering women with self-defense skills
Surveillance cameras in rural areas
Police response time
Higher taxes on guns
Gun availability
Gun-related crimes
Strict regulations on gun ownership
Background checks
Root causes of crime
Improving police awareness and responsiveness
Responsible internet usage
Strengthening law enforcement efforts
Safer and more secure environment