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Task-2
Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes
Common Errors
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Source: Ms Ramanpreet Kaur 27-07-23 Test 17
Original Text
There is a little room for doubt that need for increasing the business and cultural contact worldwide may bring some benefits which is paramount for the countries development.
Corrected
Corrected version:
There is little room for doubt that the need for increasing business and cultural contact worldwide may bring some benefits, which are paramount for the country's development.
Explanation:
"There is a little room for doubt" should be changed to "There is little room for doubt." "Countries" should be changed to "country's" to show possession. "Which is paramount for the countries development" should be changed to "which are paramount for the country's development" to match the plural subject "benefits."
Improved
Improved version:
There is little doubt that increasing business and cultural contact worldwide can bring significant benefits, which are crucial for a country's development.
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Original Text
Although other fields that it is an big issue as it could cause depletion in the national personalities there are strong arguments for and against it.
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Corrected version:
Although it is a big issue in other fields as it could cause a depletion in national identities, there are strong arguments for and against it
Explanation:
"That it is an big issue" should be changed to "it is a big issue." "Depletion in the national personalities" should be changed to "depletion in national identities" to make the sentence clearer and more concise.
Improved
Improved version:
However, there are strong arguments both for and against this issue, particularly regarding the potential depletion of national identities.
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Original Text
I think that the business and cultural exchanges between country surely have more benefits compared to the drawbacks.
Corrected
Corrected version:
I think that business and cultural exchanges between countries surely have more benefits compared to the drawbacks.
Explanation:
"The" should be removed before "business and cultural exchanges" because it is referring to exchanges in general, not specific exchanges. "Country" should be changed to "countries" to match the plural subject "exchanges."
Improved
Improved version:
In my opinion, the advantages of business and cultural exchanges between countries far outweigh any drawbacks.
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Original Text
On the one hand, the expansion of business worldwide may bring some form of employment.
Corrected
Corrected version:
On one hand, the expansion of business worldwide may bring some form of employment.
Explanation:
The phrase "the one hand" should be changed to "one hand" since it is not referring to a specific hand.
Improved
Improved version:
The expansion of businesses globally can create employment opportunities, especially in developing countries.
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Original Text
To elaborate it, the growth of foreign companies in developing countries has brought employment prospect in both the areas roller and urban which will give them a sufficient wages for the survival which ultimately improve the lifestyel of individuals.
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Corrected version:
To elaborate, the growth of foreign companies in developing countries has brought employment prospects in both rural and urban areas, which will give individuals sufficient wages for survival and ultimately improve their lifestyle.
Explanation:
"It" should be removed after "elaborate" as it is unnecessary. "Prospect" should be changed to "prospects" to match the plural subject "employment." "Areas roller" should be changed to "rural areas" for clarity. "Sufficient wages for the survival" should be changed to "sufficient wages for survival." "Lifestyel" should be changed to "lifestyle."
Improved
Improved version:
For example, the growth of foreign companies in these areas has brought job prospects to both rural and urban regions, providing individuals with sufficient wages for survival and ultimately improving their standard of living.
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Original Text
Moreover, this will lead to the increase in the tourism which surely compel the government of a country to develop the roads and all areas in a better way to increase the numbers of tourists to visit a country.
Corrected
Corrected version:
Moreover, this will lead to an increase in tourism, which will surely compel the government of a country to develop roads and all areas in a better way to increase the number of tourists visiting the country.
Explanation:
"The" should be removed before "tourism" since it is referring to tourism in general. "Increase the numbers of tourists to visit a country" should be changed to "increase the number of tourists visiting the country" for clarity and conciseness.
Improved
Improved version:
Moreover, this increased business activity can lead to a boost in tourism, prompting governments to invest in the development of infrastructure and other areas to attract more visitors.
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Original Text
Additionally, the tourists from different country will pay the revenues which might can improve the standards.
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Corrected version:
Additionally, tourists from different countries will contribute to the revenues, which might improve the standards.
Explanation:
"The" should be removed before "tourists" since it is referring to tourists in general. "Will pay the revenues" should be changed to "will contribute to the revenues" to make the sentence clearer. "Which might can improve the standards" should be changed to "which might improve the standards" for proper grammar.
Improved
Improved version:
Additionally, tourists from different countries contribute to the country's revenue, potentially raising its standards.
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Original Text
On the other hand, some people say that it may cause the loss of national identities as by wearing different clothes of different cultures which might not be respected by others or they may not value the clothes.
Corrected
Corrected version:
On the other hand, some people say that it may cause the loss of national identities by wearing clothes from different cultures, which might not be respected by others or valued by them.
Explanation:
"As by wearing different clothes of different cultures" should be changed to "by wearing clothes from different cultures" for clarity. "They may not value the clothes" should be changed to "valued by them" to avoid repetition.
Improved
Improved version:
Nevertheless, critics argue that such exchanges may result in the loss of national identities, as individuals may adopt clothing styles from different cultures that are not respected or valued by others.
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Original Text
However, not every individual is forgetting their cultural traditions.
Corrected
Corrected version:
No grammatical errors.
Improved
Improved version:
However, it is important to note that not everyone forgets their cultural traditions.
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Original Text
For instance in Punjab, many of them performing through the media that how the cultural clothes play an crucial role in individual life and advertise cultural traits.
Corrected
Corrected version:
For instance, in Punjab, many people perform through the media to show how cultural clothes play a crucial role in individual's life and advertise cultural traits.
Explanation:
"In Punjab, many of them performing" should be changed to "in Punjab, many people perform" for clarity. "That how" should be changed to "to show how" to improve sentence structure.
Improved
Improved version:
For instance, in Punjab, many people use media platforms to showcase the crucial role of cultural clothing in their lives and promote cultural values.
Source: Ms Ramanpreet Kaur 27-07-23 Test 17
Original Text!
There is a little room for doubt that need for increasing the business and cultural contact worldwide may bring some benefits which is paramount for the countries development. Although other fields that it is an big issue as it could cause depletion in the national personalities there are strong arguments for and against it. I think that the business and cultural exchanges between country surely have more benefits compared to the drawbacks.
On the one hand , the expansion of business worldwide may bring some form of employment .To elaborate it , the growth of foreign companies in developing countries has brought employment prospect in both the areas roller and urban which will give them a sufficient wages for the survival which ultimately improve the lifestyel of individuals.Moreover,this will lead to the increase in the tourism which surely compel the government of a country to develop the roads and all areas in a better way to increase the numbers of tourists to visit a country . Additionally , the tourists from different country will pay the revenues which might can improve the standards.
On the other hand , some people say that it may cause the loss of national identities as by wearing different clothes of different cultures which might not be respected by others or they may not value the clothes However , not every individual is forgetting their cultural traditions . For instance in Punjab , many of them performing through the media that how the cultural clothes play an crucial role in individual life and advertise cultural traits.
To conclude , the benefits of increasing the business and cultural contacts bring the positive changes in the form of employment prospects and development in nation by tourists rather than drawbacks.
Corrected!
There is little room for doubt that the need for increasing business and cultural contact worldwide may bring some paramount benefits for a country's development. Although there are strong arguments for and against it, I believe that the business and cultural exchanges between countries surely have more benefits compared to the drawbacks.
On the one hand, the expansion of businesses worldwide may bring employment opportunities. To elaborate, the growth of foreign companies in developing countries has brought employment prospects in both rural and urban areas, providing sufficient wages for individuals and ultimately improving their lifestyle. Moreover, this will lead to an increase in tourism, compelling the government to develop roads and other areas to attract more tourists. Additionally, tourists from different countries will contribute revenue, which can improve overall standards.
On the other hand, some people argue that this may cause a loss of national identities, as individuals may adopt different cultural clothing that may not be respected or valued by others. However, not every individual forgets their cultural traditions. For instance, in Punjab, many people showcase through media how cultural clothing plays a crucial role in their lives and promotes cultural traits.
In conclusion, the benefits of increasing business and cultural contacts bring positive changes in the form of employment prospects and national development, outweighing the drawbacks.
IMPROVED VERSION
There is little doubt that increasing business and cultural contact worldwide can bring significant benefits, which are crucial for a country's development. However, there are strong arguments both for and against this issue, particularly regarding the potential depletion of national identities.
In my opinion, the advantages of business and cultural exchanges between countries far outweigh any drawbacks. The expansion of businesses globally can create employment opportunities, especially in developing countries. For example, the growth of foreign companies in these areas has brought job prospects to both rural and urban regions, providing individuals with sufficient wages for survival and ultimately improving their standard of living.
Moreover, this increased business activity can lead to a boost in tourism, prompting governments to invest in the development of infrastructure and other areas to attract more visitors. Additionally, tourists from different countries contribute to the country's revenue, potentially raising its standards. Nevertheless, critics argue that such exchanges may result in the loss of national identities, as individuals may adopt clothing styles from different cultures that are not respected or valued by others. However, it is important to note that not everyone forgets their cultural traditions. For instance, in Punjab, many people use media platforms to showcase the crucial role of cultural clothing in their lives and promote cultural values.
In conclusion, the benefits of increasing business and cultural contacts far outweigh any potential drawbacks. These exchanges bring positive changes such as employment prospects and development through tourism, ultimately enhancing the overall lifestyle of individuals and the nation as a whole.
Key Phrases:
Increasing business and cultural contact worldwide
Paramount for the country's development
Little room for doubt
Depletion in national identities
Strong arguments for and against
Advantages outweigh drawbacks
Expansion of businesses globally
Employment opportunities
Job prospects in rural and urban areas
Sufficient wages for survival
Improved standard of living
Boost in tourism
Development of infrastructure
Contribution to country's revenue
Potential loss of national identities
Adoption of clothing styles from different cultures
Cultural traditions
Showcasing the crucial role of cultural clothing
Promoting cultural values
Enhancing overall lifestyle of individuals and the nation