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Task-1

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

1

Source: Ms Shraddha 19-07-23  MT 05

Original Text

The provided chart and graph offers and comprehensive overview of male and female participants in Olympics spanning the period from 1924 to 2012. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The provided chart and graph offer a comprehensive overview of male and female participants in the Olympics spanning the period from 1924 to 2012.

Explanation: 

The verb "offer" should agree with the plural subject "chart and graph."

Improved

Improved version:

The provided chart and graph offer a detailed analysis of the participation of males and females in the Olympics spanning the period from 1924 to 2012.

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Original Text

Overall, in 2012, number of male was high am female participants are higher than before years.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Overall, in 2012, the number of male participants was high, and female participants were higher than in previous years.

Explanation: 

The verb "was" should be changed to "were" to agree with the plural subject "number of male participants." "Am" should be changed to "and" for proper conjunction. "Before years" should be changed to "in previous years" for clarity.

Improved

Improved version:

Overall, in 2012, there was a significant increase in the number of male participants, while the number of female participants surpassed previous years.

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Original Text

Turning to 1924, number of men, participants in the Olympics was 3000 and then increased to 43,000, in 1984 it was steadily rose by 5100 and then dramatically upward 5900.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Turning to 1924, the number of male participants in the Olympics was 3000 and then increased to 43,000. In 1984, it steadily rose by 5100 and then dramatically increased by 5900.

Explanation: 

The sentence is unclear and lacks proper punctuation. I have separated the sentence into two parts for clarity. "Steadily rose" should be changed to "steadily rose" for correct verb tense. "Upward" should be changed to "increased" for clarity.

Improved

Improved version:

Looking back to 1924, the number of male participants in the Olympics started at 3000 and experienced a substantial rise to 43,000. In 1984, there was a steady increase of 5100, followed by a significant surge of 5900.

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Original Text

Furthermore, in 1924 number of female participant in 1924 was lower than male participants that was only 100.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Furthermore, in 1924, the number of female participants was lower than male participants, with only 100 female participants.

Explanation: 

The sentence is unclear and lacks proper punctuation. I have added a comma after "1924" for clarity. "That" should be changed to "with" to indicate the number of female participants. 

Improved

Improved version:

Furthermore, in 1924, the number of female participants was significantly lower than that of males, with only 100 female participants.

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Original Text

However, in 1952, it was increased to 300. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

However, in 1952, it increased to 300. 

Explanation: 

The word "was" is unnecessary and can be removed for clarity.

Improved

Improved version:

However, in 1952, it saw an increase to 300. 

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Original Text

In 1984, the number of male was 5100, whereas female participants was 1500 that was lower than male participants.

Corrected

Corrected version:

In 1984, the number of male participants was 5100, whereas the number of female participants was 1500, which was lower than the number of male participants.

Explanation: 

"Male" should be changed to "male participants" for clarity. "Was" should be changed to "were" to agree with the plural subject "female participants." I have added "the number of" before "female participants" for clarity. 

Improved

Improved version:

In 1984, the number of male participants reached 5100, while the number of female participants stood at 1500, indicating a lower representation compared to males.

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Original Text

However, in 2012, it can be seen that, it was a upward trend and the participants of female rose dramatically, 4900.

Corrected

Corrected version:

However, in 2012, it can be seen that there was an upward trend, and the number of female participants rose dramatically to 4900.

Explanation: 

The sentence is unclear and lacks proper punctuation. I have removed the comma after "that" for clarity. "Participants of female" should be changed to "number of female participants" for clarity. 

Improved

Improved version:

However, in 2012, there was a noticeable upward trend, with a dramatic increase in the number of female participants to 4900.

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Original Text

The total number of participants in 1924 was 3000 and then it rose upward 1952, 7000.

Corrected

Corrected version:

The total number of participants in 1924 was 3000, and then it rose to 7000 in 1952.


Explanation: 


The sentence is unclear and lacks proper punctuation. I have added a comma after "1924" for clarity. "Upward" should be changed to "to" to indicate the increase in number.

Improved

Improved version:

The total number of participants in 1924 amounted to 3000, and it subsequently rose to 7000 in 1952.

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Original Text

Furthermore, in 1984, participants were 6500 and then steadily reached upward in 2012.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Furthermore, in 1984, participants numbered 6500 and then steadily increased until 2012. 


Explanation: 


"Participants were" should be changed to "participants numbered" for clarity. "Reached upward" should be changed to "increased" for clarity. 

Improved

Improved version:

Furthermore, in 1984, the number of participants reached 6500 and continued to steadily increase until 2012.

10

Original Text

In conclusion, it can be seen that the number of male participants are greater than a number of female participants. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In conclusion, it can be seen that the number of male participants is greater than the number of female participants.

Explanation: 

"Are" should be changed to "is" to agree with the singular subject "number." "A number of" should be changed to "the number of" for clarity. 

Improved

Improved version:

In conclusion, it is evident that there is a higher representation of male participants compared to females.

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Original Text

In 1924 female participant was only 100 and then dramatically increased by 4900.

Corrected

Corrected version:

In 1924, the number of female participants was only 100 and then dramatically increased to 4900.


Explanation: 


"Female participant" should be changed to "number of female participants" for clarity. "Increased by" should be changed to "increased to" to indicate the final number.

Improved

Improved version:

In 1924, the number of female participants started at a mere 100 and then experienced a remarkable increase to 4900.

Source: Ms Shraddha 19-07-23  MT 05

Original Text!

  The provided chart and graph offers and comprehensive overview of male and female participants in Olympics spanning the period from 1924 to 2012. 

Overall, in 2012, number of male was high am female participants are higher than before years.

Turning to 1924,  number of men, participants in the Olympics was 3000 and then increased to 43,000, in 1984 it was steadily rose by 5100 and then dramatically upward 5900. Furthermore, in 1924 number of female participant in 1924 was lower than male participants that was only 100. However, in 1952, it was increased to 300. In 1984, the number of male was 5100, whereas female participants was 1500 that was lower than male participants. However, in 2012, it can be seen that, it was a upward trend and the participants of female rose dramatically, 4900. The total number of participants in 1924 was 3000 and then it rose upward 1952, 7000. Furthermore, in 1984, participants were 6500 and then steadily reached upward in 2012. 

In conclusion, it can be seen that the number of male participants are greater than a number of female participants. In 1924 female participant was only 100 and then dramatically increased by 4900.

Corrected!

  The provided chart and graph offer a comprehensive overview of male and female participants in the Olympics spanning the period from 1924 to 2012. 

Overall, in 2012, the number of male participants was higher than before, but the number of female participants was even higher.

Turning to 1924, the number of male participants in the Olympics was 3000 and then increased to 43,000. In 1984, it steadily rose by 5100 and then dramatically upwards to 5900. Furthermore, in 1924, the number of female participants was lower than male participants, with only 100. However, in 1952, it increased to 300. In 1984, the number of males was 5100, whereas female participants were 1500, which was lower than male participants. However, in 2012, it can be seen that there was an upward trend and the number of female participants rose dramatically to 4900. The total number of participants in 1924 was 3000 and then it rose to 7000 in 1952. Furthermore, in 1984, participants were 6500 and then steadily reached upwards in 2012. 

In conclusion, it can be seen that the number of male participants is greater than the number of female participants. In 1924, female participants were only 100 and then dramatically increased by 4900.

IMPROVED VERSION

The provided chart and graph offer a comprehensive overview of male and female participants in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012. 


Overall, in 2012, there was a significant increase in the number of male participants, while the number of female participants surpassed previous years. 


Looking back to 1924, the number of male participants in the Olympics started at 3000 and experienced a substantial rise to 43,000. In 1984, there was a steady increase of 5100, followed by a significant surge of 5900. Furthermore, in 1924, the number of female participants was significantly lower than that of males, with only 100 female participants. However, in 1952, it saw an increase to 300. In 1984, the number of male participants reached 5100, while the number of female participants stood at 1500, indicating a lower representation compared to males. However, in 2012, there was a noticeable upward trend, with a dramatic increase in the number of female participants to 4900. The total number of participants in 1924 amounted to 3000, and it subsequently rose to 7000 in 1952. Furthermore, in 1984, the number of participants reached 6500 and continued to steadily increase until 2012. 


In conclusion, it is evident that there is a higher representation of male participants compared to females. In 1924, the number of female participants started at a mere 100 and then experienced a remarkable increase to 4900.

Key Phrases and Vocabulary