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Task-1

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

1

Source: Ms Sakshi  18-07-23  MT 07

Original Text

The presented line graph provides the information of the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. There were two factors shown in the graph which lead the pollution namely: smoke and sulphur dioxide. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

NO ERRORS

Improved

Improved version:

The line graph presents data on pollution levels in London from 1600 to 2000, focusing on two main contributors: smoke and sulphur dioxide. 

2

Original Text

Regarding in 1600, the pollution level due to smoke and sulphur dioxide was nearly about 50 and 52 micrograms per cubic metre.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Regarding 1600, the pollution level due to smoke and sulphur dioxide was nearly 50 and 52 micrograms per cubic metre.


Explanation: 


The phrase "in" is not necessary in this sentence. 

Improved

Improved version:

In 1600, the pollution levels attributed to smoke and sulphur dioxide were approximately 50 and 52 micrograms per cubic metre, respectively. 

3

Original Text

Furthermore, from 1650 to 1700, the pollution level due to smoke was steadily increased to 200 per cubic metre, whereas due to sulphur dioxide the pollution level increased dramatically to 700 per cubic metre.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Furthermore, from 1650 to 1700, the pollution level due to smoke steadily increased to 200 micrograms per cubic metre, whereas due to sulphur dioxide, the pollution level increased dramatically to 700 micrograms per cubic metre.

Explanation: 

The units of measurement (micrograms per cubic metre) were missing in the original sentence. Additionally, a comma was needed before "whereas" to separate the two clauses.

Improved

Improved version:

Between 1650 and 1700, the pollution level caused by smoke steadily increased to 200 micrograms per cubic metre, while the level of sulphur dioxide pollution dramatically rose to 700 micrograms per cubic metre. 

4

Original Text

In 1750, there was erratic decrease in the pollution level due to smoke and sulphur dioxide.

Corrected

Corrected version:

 In 1750, there was an erratic decrease in the pollution levels due to smoke and sulphur dioxide.


Explanation: 


The word "decrease" should be followed by the article "an" to indicate a singular decrease. Additionally, "levels" should be plural to match the plural subject "pollution."

Improved

Improved version:

An erratic decrease in pollution levels caused by both smoke and sulphur dioxide was observed in 1750. 

5

Original Text

Turning to, from 1800 to 1900, the pollution level due to smoke and sulphur dioxide increased dramatically nearly about 450 and 900 respectively.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Turning to the period from 1800 to 1900, the pollution levels due to smoke and sulphur dioxide increased dramatically to nearly 450 and 900 respectively.



Explanation: 


The phrase "from 1800 to 1900" should be introduced by the preposition "to" and the sentence needed a clearer indication of the units of measurement (micrograms per cubic metre).

Improved

Improved version:

From 1800 to 1900, pollution levels due to smoke and sulphur dioxide experienced a significant increase, reaching nearly 450 and 900 micrograms per cubic metre, respectively. 

6

Original Text

Therefore, from 1900 to 2000, there was erratic decrease in both the factors of the pollution level and approaches 0.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Therefore, from 1900 to 2000, there was an erratic decrease in both factors of the pollution levels, approaching 0.



Explanation: 


The word "decrease" should be followed by the article "an" to indicate a singular decrease. Additionally, "level" should be plural to match the plural subject "factors." The verb "approaches" should be changed to "approaching" to match the present participle form.

Improved

Improved version:

Finally, from 1900 to 2000, there was an erratic decrease in both factors of pollution levels, gradually approaching zero. 

Source: Ms Sakshi 17-07-23  MT 07

Original Text!

The presented line graph provides the information of the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. There were two factors shown in the graph which lead the pollution namely: smoke and sulphur dioxide. 

Regarding in 1600, the pollution level due to smoke and sulphur dioxide was nearly about 50 and 52 micrograms per cubic metre. Furthermore, from 1650 to 1700, the pollution level due to smoke was steadily increased to 200 per cubic metre, whereas due to sulphur dioxide the pollution level increased dramatically to 700 per cubic metre. In 1750, there was erratic decrease in the pollution level due to smoke and sulphur dioxide. 

Turning to, from 1800 to 1900, the pollution level due to smoke and sulphur dioxide increased dramatically nearly about 450 and 900 respectively. Therefore, from 1900 to 2000, there was erratic decrease in both the factors of the pollution level and approaches 0.

To conclude, that in 2000, the pollution level in both the factors that was smoke and sulphur dioxide approaches 0.

Corrected!

The presented line graph provides information on the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. There were two factors shown in the graph that contributed to pollution, namely smoke and sulphur dioxide. 

In 1600, the pollution level due to smoke and sulphur dioxide was approximately 50 and 52 micrograms per cubic metre, respectively. Furthermore, from 1650 to 1700, the pollution level due to smoke steadily increased to 200 per cubic metre, while the pollution level due to sulphur dioxide dramatically increased to 700 per cubic metre. In 1750, there was an erratic decrease in the pollution levels for both smoke and sulphur dioxide. 

Moving on to the period from 1800 to 1900, the pollution level due to smoke and sulphur dioxide increased dramatically to nearly 450 and 900, respectively. However, from 1900 to 2000, there was an erratic decrease in both factors, and they approached 0.

In summary, the pollution levels for both smoke and sulphur dioxide approached 0 in 2000.

IMPROVED VERSION

The line graph presents data on pollution levels in London from 1600 to 2000, focusing on two main contributors: smoke and sulphur dioxide. 

In 1600, the pollution levels attributed to smoke and sulphur dioxide were approximately 50 and 52 micrograms per cubic metre, respectively. Between 1650 and 1700, the pollution level caused by smoke steadily increased to 200 micrograms per cubic metre, while the level of sulphur dioxide pollution dramatically rose to 700 micrograms per cubic metre. An erratic decrease in pollution levels caused by both smoke and sulphur dioxide was observed in 1750. 

From 1800 to 1900, pollution levels due to smoke and sulphur dioxide experienced a significant increase, reaching nearly 450 and 900 micrograms per cubic metre, respectively. Finally, from 1900 to 2000, there was an erratic decrease in both factors of pollution levels, gradually approaching zero. 

In summary, by 2000, pollution levels in London due to smoke and sulphur dioxide had significantly decreased, nearly reaching zero.

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