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Task-2

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Ms Shraddha 16-08-23 MT 14

Original Text

In many ways, the world would not be the same without the proper guidance.

Corrected

This sentence is grammatically correct. 

Improved

Improved version:

In many ways, the world would be significantly different without proper guidance. 

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Original Text

Nowadays technology has been changing the minds of individuals, ultimate this effect the society.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Nowadays technology has been changing the minds of individuals, ultimately affecting society. 


Explanation: 

The word "ultimate" is used incorrectly in this sentence. It should be "ultimately." Additionally, the word "effect" should be "affect" to indicate that technology has an impact on society.

Improved

Improved version:

The rapid development of technology has had a profound impact on individuals and society as a whole. 

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Original Text

Disputes are the main cause, but one of them is technology because technology has been rapidly developing day by day. A significant number of folks have hectic schedule. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Disputes are the main cause, but one of it is technology because technology has been rapidly developing. A significant number of folks have hectic schedules. 

Explanation: 

The phrase "developing day by day" is redundant. Additionally, the word "them" should be "it" to refer to technology as a singular noun. The word "schedule" should be pluralized to "schedules" to match the subject "a significant number of folks." 

Improved

Improved version:

One notable consequence is the trend towards smaller families, often resulting from disputes caused by the demands of technology and busy schedules.

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Original Text

In the current pace of life, a subsequent number of people are using the internet.

Corrected

Corrected version:

In the current pace of life, a growing number of people are using the internet.


Explanation: 


The phrase "a subsequent number of people" is awkwardly worded. It would be clearer to say "a growing number of people" or "an increasing number of people."

Improved

Improved version:

In today's fast-paced world, an increasing number of individuals are utilizing the internet.

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Original Text

Excess use of the internet can cause many detrimental problems in people's life.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Excess use of the internet can cause many detrimental problems in people's lives.

Explanation: 

The word "detrimental" should be "detrimental" to match the plural noun "problems." Additionally, "people's life" should be "people's lives" to indicate the plural possessive form.

Improved

Improved version:

Excessive internet usage can lead to numerous detrimental issues in individuals' lives.

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Original Text

One of the main reason is bonding with families because people cannot give times to families, in this way family relations will break.

Corrected

Corrected version:

One of the main reasons is bonding with families because people cannot give time to their families, leading to the breakdown of family relations.

Explanation: 

The phrase "One of the main reason" should be "One of the main reasons." Additionally, "give times to families" should be "give time to their families." The phrase "in this way family re lations will break" is awkwardly worded and could be rewritten for clarity.

Improved

Improved version:

One of the primary reasons is the lack of bonding with families due to individuals' inability to allocate time, resulting in the deterioration of family relationships.

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Original Text

I'd people cannot spend time with their families. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

If people cannot spend time with their families. 

Explanation: 

The contraction "I'd" should be expanded to "If" to make the sentence grammatically correct. 

Improved

Improved version:

If individuals are unable to allocate time for their families.

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Original Text

For instance, children may also disobey them because their parents are busy with their work. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

For instance, children may also disobey their parents because the parents are busy with their work.

Explanation: 

The pronoun "them" is ambiguous in this sentence. It is unclear who it refers to. It should be clarified to refer to the parents. 

Improved

Improved version:

For example, children may also defy their parents due to their parents' busy work schedules. 

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Original Text

As a result, children become more and more arrogant as in same family there is nobody taught children right thing as they all are hectic.

Corrected

Corrected version:

As a result, children become more and more arrogant because there is nobody in the family teaching them the right things due to everyone's busy schedules.

Explanation: 

The phrase "in same family there is nobody taught children right thing" is grammatically incorrect. It should be rephrased to clarify the meaning. 

Improved

Improved version:

Consequently, children become increasingly arrogant as there is no one in the family guiding them towards proper behavior, given everyone's hectic routines.

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Original Text

Turning to effect of small families, first, bonding with families will loss and they cannot manage their times, in this way bonding will less than before.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Turning to the effect of small families, first, bonding with families will be lost and they cannot manage their time, resulting in less bonding than before. 

Explanation: 

The phrase "bonding with families will loss" should be "bonding with families will be lost." Additionally, "they cannot manage their times" should be "they cannot manage their time." The phrase "bonding will less than before" is awkwardly worded and could be rewritten for clarity. 

Improved

Improved version:

Shifting attention to the impact of small families, firstly, the sense of connection within families will diminish, and individuals will struggle to allocate time effectively, resulting in reduced bonding compared to previous generations.

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Original Text

Furthermore, if people line in small families, there grandparents, parents will suffers from many severe problems such as diabets, Cancer and financially support of younger one's. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Furthermore, if people live in small families, their grandparents and parents will suffer from many severe problems such as diabetes, cancer, and financial support of younger ones. 

Explanation: 

The word "line" should be "live" to make the sentence grammatically correct. Additionally, "there grandparents" should be "their grandparents" to indicate possession. The word "suffers" should be "suffer" to agree with the plural subject "grandparents, parents." The word "diabets" should be "diabetes" for correct spelling. The phrase "financially support of younger one's" should be "financially support of younger ones" for correct pluralization.

Improved

Improved version:

Furthermore, individuals residing in small families expose their grandparents and parents to numerous severe challenges, including diabetes, cancer, and the burden of financially supporting younger family members.

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Original Text

Moreover, people do not have experience of the world without the proper guidance, the face many problems.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Moreover, people who do not have experience of the world without proper guidance face many problems.

Explanation: 

The phrase "the face many problems" is grammatically incorrect. It should be rephrased to clarify the meaning.

Improved

Improved version:

Moreover, individuals lacking exposure to the world without adequate guidance encounter a multitude of difficulties.

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Original Text

In conclusion, it is evident that, smaller family sizes have many problems.

Corrected

Corrected version:

In conclusion, it is evident that smaller family sizes have many problems.

Improved

Improved version:

In conclusion, it is apparent that smaller family sizes give rise to various challenges.

Source: Ms Shraddha 16-08-23  MT 14

Original Text!

  In many ways, the world would not be the same without the proper guidance. Nowadays technology has been changing the minds of individuals, ultimate this effect the society. 

First, countries have developed and there has been a trend of small families. Disputes are the main cause, but one of them is technology because technology has been rapidly developing day by day. A significant number of folks have hectic schedule. They are busy with their work. For instance, family disputes may occur. 

In the current pace of life, a subsequent number of people are using the internet. Excess use of the internet can cause many detrimental problems in people's life. One of the main reason is bonding with families because people cannot give times to families, in this way family relations will break. I'd people cannot spend time with their families. For instance, children may also disobey them because their parents are busy with their work. As a result, children become more and more arrogant as in same family there is nobody taught children right thing as they all are hectic. 

Turning to effect of small families, first, bonding with families will loss and they cannot manage their times, in this way bonding will less than befo re. Furthermore, if people line in small families, there grandparents, parents will suffers from many severe problems such as diabets, Cancer and financially support of younger one's. Moreover, people do not have experience of the world without the proper guidance, the face many problems. 

In conclusion, it is evident that, smaller family sizes have many problems.

Corrected!

         xcvfg In many ways, the world would not be the same without proper guidance. Nowadays, technology has been changing the minds of individuals, ultimately affecting society. First, countries have developed, and there has been a trend of small families. Disputes are the main cause, but one of them is technology because technology has been rapidly developing day by day. A significant number of folks have a hectic schedule. They are busy with their work. For instance, family disputes may occur.
            In the current pace of life, a subsequent number of people are using the internet. Excessive use of the internet can cause many detrimental problems in people's lives. One of the main reasons is bonding with families because people cannot give time to families, and in this way, family relations will break. If people cannot spend time with their families, children may also disobey them because their parents are busy with their work. As a result, children become more and more arrogant as in the same family, nobody taught children the right things as they are all busy.
             Turning to the effect of small families, first, bonding with families will be lost, and they cannot manage their time, so bonding will be less than before. Furthermore, if people live in small families, their grandparents and parents will suffer from many severe problems such as diabetes, cancer, and financial support for younger ones. Moreover, people do not have the experience of the world without proper guidance, so they face many problems.
                In conclusion, it is evident that smaller family sizes have many problems.

IMPROVED VERSION

   In many ways, the world would be significantly different without proper guidance. The rapid development of technology has had a profound impact on individuals and society as a whole. One notable consequence is the trend towards smaller families, often resulting from disputes caused by the demands of technology and busy schedules.
     In today's fast-paced world, an increasing number of people rely heavily on the internet. However, excessive use of the internet can lead to detrimental effects on people's lives, particularly in terms of family relationships. With limited time available, individuals struggle to allocate sufficient time to spend with their families. This lack of quality time can lead to strained relationships and even family breakdowns. For example, children may become disobedient or arrogant due to the absence of parental guidance and attention.
        Moreover, the impact of smaller families extends beyond strained relationships. Grandparents and parents in these families face various challenges, such as health issues like diabetes and cancer, as well as financial burdens in supporting their younger relatives. Additionally, individuals growing up in smaller families may lack the experience and guidance necessary to navigate the complexities of the world, resulting in increased difficulties and problems.
           In conclusion, the shift towards smaller family sizes has brought about numerous problems. The demands of technology and busy schedules have strained family relationships, leading to a loss of bonding and inadequate time spent together. Furthermore, the consequences of smaller families extend to health issues and financial burdens. Without proper guidance and support, individuals face numerous challenges in navigating the world.

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