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Task-1
Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes
Common Errors
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Source: Ms Kanak 03-07-23
Original Text
The bar chart gives information about the modes of transportation, use in a European city, for travelling between the years 1960 and 2000.
Corrected
Corrected version:
The bar chart gives information about the modes of transportation used in a European city for travelling between the years 1960 and 2000.
Explanation:
The original sentence is missing the word "used" after "transportation" and contains an unnecessary comma after "transportation." Additionally, the phrase "use in a European city" should be rearranged to "used in a European city" for correct grammar.
Improved
Improved version:
The bar chart provides information about the modes of transportation used in a European city for travel between 1960 and 2000.
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Original Text
Regarding the mode of transportation used in 1960, it has the highest percentage for bus(37%) and the lowest for car(5%). Notably, a quarter of the population preferred bike as their means of transportation.
Corrected
Corrected version:
Regarding the mode of transportation used in 1960, buses had the highest percentage (37%), while cars had the lowest (5%). Notably, a quarter of the population preferred bikes as their means of transportation.
Explanation:
The original sentence incorrectly uses "it" to refer to the mode of transportation, which creates ambiguity. By specifying "buses" and "cars," the sentence becomes clearer. Additionally, "bus" and "car" should be pluralized as "buses" and "cars." The phrase "bike" should be changed to "bikes" to maintain consistency.
Improved
Improved version:
Concerning transportation modes in 1960, buses had the highest percentage (37%), while cars had the lowest (5%). Notably, a quarter of the population preferred bikes as their means of transportation.
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Original Text
In 1980, 25% of the Europeans use bus for travelling, whereas less than a fifth travelled by foot. The figure for both car and bike for almost the same.
Corrected
Corrected version:
In 1980, 25% of Europeans used the bus for travelling, whereas less than a fifth travelled by foot. The figures for both cars and bikes almost the same.
Explanation:
The original sentence uses the wrong verb tense ("use" instead of "used") and is missing the definite article "the" before "bus." "Europeans" should not have an article. The phrase "figure for" should be changed to "figures for" to match the plural subjects "cars" and "bikes." The phrase "almost the same" is more appropriate than "for almost the same" in this context.
Improved
Improved version:
In 1980, the bus was used by 25% of Europeans for travel, whereas less than a fifth traveled by foot. The figures for both cars and bikes were almost identical.
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Original Text
Travelling to Europe’s okay 2000 figures for travelling by car by its population, 35%, being the highest in proportion, whereas 6%, being the lowest, was for moving by bike.
Corrected
Corrected version:
Looking at the 2000 figures for travelling by car in Europe, it had the highest proportion at 35%, while bike travel had the lowest proportion at 6%.
Explanation:
The original sentence contains a nonsensical phrase "Travelling to Europe's okay" which seems out of context. The sentence is rephrased to provide a clear introductory statement. The phrase "Europe's okay" is removed. The verb tense in "was for moving" is changed to "had" for consistency with the previous sentence. The phrase "in proportion" is added to clarify the comparison between car and bike travel percentages.
Improved
Improved version:
Examining the 2000 figures for car travel in Europe, it had the highest proportion at 35%, while bike travel had the lowest proportion at 6%.
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Original Text
In summary, as a chart illustrate, we can see that the rise in private transport over public transport was reflected in an approximately corresponding rate of increment in years. At the same time, travelling by foot dropped by more than a half.
Corrected
Corrected version:
In summary, as the chart illustrates, we can see that the increase in private transport usage compared to public transport was reflected in a corresponding rate of increment over the years. Additionally, the number of people travelling by foot dropped by more than half.
Explanation:
The original sentence has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. The phrase "as a chart illustrate" should be changed to "as the chart illustrates" to match subject-verb agreement. The phrase "rate of increment in years" is not clear and can be rephrased as "rate of increase over the years." The phrase "more than a half" is corrected to "more than half" for proper phrasing.
Improved
Improved version:
Overall, as the chart illustrates, it can be observed that there was an increase in the usage of private transport compared to public transport, reflected in a corresponding increment over the years. Additionally, the number of people traveling by foot decreased by more than half.
Source: Ms Kanak 03-07-23
Original Text!
The bar chart gives information about the modes of transportation, use in a european city, for travelling between the years 1960 and 2000
Regarding the mode of transportation used in 1960, it has the highest percentage for bus(37%) and the lowest for car(5%). Notably, a quarter of the population preferred bike as their means of transportation.
In 1980, 25% of the Europeans use bus for travelling, whereas less than a fifth travelled by foot. The figure for both car and bike for almost the same.
Travelling to Europe’s okay 2000 figures for travelling by car by its population, 35%, being the highest in proportion, whereas 6%, being the lowest, was for moving by bike.
In summary, as a chart illustrate, we can see that the rise in private transport over public transport was reflected in an approximately corresponding rate of increment in years. At the same time, travelling by foot dropped by more than a half.
Corrected!
The bar chart provides information about the modes of transportation used in a European city for travel between the years 1960 and 2000.
Regarding the mode of transportation used in 1960, the highest percentage was for buses (37%), while cars had the lowest percentage (5%). Notably, a quarter of the population preferred bikes as their means of transportation.
In 1980, 25% of Europeans used the bus for travel, whereas less than a fifth traveled by foot. The figures for both cars and bikes were almost the same.
Looking at the 2000 figures for traveling by car in Europe, it had the highest proportion at 35% among the population, whereas bike travel had the lowest proportion at 6%.
In summary, as the chart illustrates, we can see that the rise in private transport over public transport was reflected in an approximately corresponding rate of increase over the years. At the same time, travel by foot dropped by more than half.
IMPROVED VERSION
The given bar chart illustrates the modes of transportation utilized in a European city for travel between 1960 and 2000. The chart presents data on the percentages of bus, car, bike, and foot travel during this period.
Overall, there was a noticeable shift in transportation preferences over the four decades. The dominance of buses in 1960 gradually decreased, while car usage witnessed a significant increase by the year 2000. Moreover, bike travel remained relatively stable, while the percentage of individuals traveling on foot experienced a substantial decline.
In 1960, the most popular means of transportation was the bus, accounting for the highest percentage at 37%. Cars were the least preferred option, with only 5% of individuals choosing them for travel. Notably, a considerable proportion, approximately one-fourth of the population, favored bikes as their mode of transportation.
Moving forward to 1980, bus travel continued to be widely preferred, constituting 25% of the total transportation mode. Conversely, the percentage of individuals traveling on foot decreased to less than one-fifth. Both cars and bikes shared a similar proportion, indicating a relatively stable preference for these modes of transport.
By the year 2000, private transport emerged as the dominant choice, as car travel experienced a significant surge, representing the highest proportion at 35%. In contrast, bike travel remained considerably low, constituting only 6% of the total. This indicates a clear shift in preferences towards motorized forms of transport.
In summary, the bar chart demonstrates the changing transportation patterns in a European city from 1960 to 2000. The rise of private transport, reflected by the increasing percentage of car travel, and the declining popularity of non-motorized options, such as bikes and foot travel, are notable trends. These findings highlight the shift towards more convenient and efficient modes of transport over the decades.
Key Phrases and Vocabulary
The given bar chart illustrates...
Overall, there was a noticeable shift...
The dominance of buses gradually decreased...
Car usage witnessed a significant increase...
Bike travel remained relatively stable...
The percentage of individuals traveling on foot experienced a substantial decline...
In 1960, the most popular means of transportation was...
Cars were the least preferred option...
Notably, a considerable proportion...
Moving forward to 1980...
Bus travel continued to be widely preferred...
The percentage of individuals traveling on foot decreased...
Both cars and bikes shared a similar proportion...
By the year 2000, private transport emerged as the dominant choice...
This indicates a clear shift in preferences towards...
In conclusion, the bar chart demonstrates...
The rise of private transport...
The declining popularity of non-motorized options...
These findings highlight the shift towards...
Key Vocabulary
Modes of transportation
Utilised
Preferences
Dominance
Witnessed
Significant increase/decrease
Relatively stable
Proportion
Notably
Favored
Moving forward
Widely preferred
Indicating
Motorized forms of transport
Changing transportation patterns
Trends
Shift
Convenient and efficient modes of transport
Cohesive analysis
Key observations