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Task-1

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Ms Ramanpreet Kaur 17-07-23  Day 12

Original Text

The provided to charts depicts the different elements and renewable sources which are used to generate electricity in Germany and France in 2009. 

Corrected

Corrected version:


The provided two charts depict the different elements and renewable sources used to generate electricity in Germany and France in 2009. 

Explanation: 

"to" should be replaced with "two" to indicate the correct number of charts. 

Improved

Improved version:

The provided two charts depict the different elements and renewable sources used to generate electricity in Germany and France in 2009.

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Original Text

Overall, it is clearly evident that in Germany, the highest proportion of conventional thermal was used from all type of sources while in France highest percentage was nuclear power. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Overall, it is clearly evident that in Germany, the highest proportion of conventional thermal power was used among all types of sources, while in France, the highest percentage was nuclear power.

Explanation: 

Improved

Improved version:

Overall, it is evident that Germany predominantly relied on conventional thermal power, while France had the highest percentage of nuclear power. 

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Original Text

Moving with the former pie chart, 59.9% of conventional thermal was used to produce electricity which was the doubled of nuclear and renewable source 23.0% and 17.4% respectively. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Moving to the former pie chart, 59.9% of conventional thermal power was used to produce electricity, which was double the amount of nuclear power (23.0%) and renewable sources (17.4%) respectively.

Explanation: 

Improved

Improved version:

Moving to the former pie chart, conventional thermal power accounted for 59.9% of electricity generation, double the percentage of nuclear and renewable sources at 23.0% and 17.4% respectively. 

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Original Text

In terms of renewable, the figure for biomass and wind was much more higher comparative to the hydroelectric. Moreover, very fewer percentage of solar was added to make the electricity (6.1%). 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In terms of renewables, the figure for biomass and wind was much higher compared to hydroelectric power. Moreover, a much lower percentage of solar energy (6.1%) was used to generate electricity.

Explanation: 

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Improved version:

Regarding renewables, biomass and wind power had significantly higher shares compared to hydroelectric power. However, solar power made a relatively small contribution at just 6.1%. 

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Original Text

Turning towards to the later pie chart, in France the nuclear proportion was twice as much for conventional thermal and renewable which is accounted for 13.7%and 10.3%. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Turning to the latter pie chart, in France, the proportion of nuclear power was twice as high as that of conventional thermal and renewable sources, accounting for 13.7% and 10.3% respectively.

Explanation: 

Improved

Improved version:

Turning to the later pie chart, France had twice as much nuclear power as conventional thermal and renewable sources, with proportions of 13.7% and 10.3% respectively.

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Original Text

There was very less contribution of wind (10.5%)and biomass (8.1%)to generate the electricity whereas the highest amount of hydroelectric was in use ti produce the current which was six time higher than these two sources. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

There was a very low contribution of wind (10.5%) and biomass (8.1%) to electricity generation, whereas the highest amount of hydroelectric power was used to produce electricity, which was six times higher than these two sources.

Explanation: 

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Improved version:

Wind power (10.5%) and biomass (8.1%) made minimal contributions to electricity generation in France, whereas hydroelectric power was six times higher than these two sources.

Source: Ms Ramanpreet Kaur 17-07-23  Day 12

Original Text!

  The provided to charts depicts the different elements and renewable sources which are used to generate electricity in Germany and France in 2009.

  Overall, it is clearly evident that in Germany, the highest proportion of conventional thermal was used from all type of sources while in France highest percentage was nuclear power.

  Moving with the former pie chart, 59.9% of conventional thermal was used to produce electricity which was the doubled of nuclear and renewable source 23.0% and 17.4% respectively. In terms of renewable, the figure for biomass and wind was much more higher comparative to the hydroelectric. Moreover, very fewer percentage of solar was added to make the electricity (6.1%).

  Turning towards to the later pie chart, in France the nuclear proportion was twice as much for conventional thermal and renewable which is accounted for 13.7%and 10.3%. there was very less contribution of wind (10.5%)and biomass (8.1%)to generate the electricity whereas the highest amount of hydroelectric was in use ti produce the current which was six time higher than these two sources.

Corrected!

The provided charts depict the different elements and renewable sources that were used to generate electricity in Germany and France in 2009.

 Overall, it is clearly evident that in Germany, the highest proportion of conventional thermal power was used from all types of sources, while in France, the highest percentage was nuclear power.

 Moving with the former pie chart, 59.9% of conventional thermal energy was used to produce electricity, which was double the nuclear and renewable sources 23.0% and 17.4%, respectively. In terms of renewables, the figures for biomass and wind were much higher compared to hydroelectric. Moreover, a very small percentage of solar energy was added to make the electricity (6.1%).

Turning to the later pie chart, in France, the nuclear proportion was twice as much as conventional thermal and renewable, which accounted for 13.7% and 10.3%, respectively. There was a very low contribution of wind (10.5%) and biomass (8.1%) to generate the electricity, whereas the highest amount of hydroelectric was used to produce the current, which was six times higher than these two sources. 

IMPROVED VERSION

The provided charts present a comparison of electricity generation in Germany and France in 2009, focusing on different energy sources and their proportions.

In terms of Germany, conventional thermal power emerged as the primary source, constituting 59.9% of the electricity generated. This was twice the combined percentage of nuclear (23.0%) and renewable (17.4%) sources. Notably, biomass and wind power had notably higher shares than hydroelectric power, while solar power accounted for a relatively small fraction (6.1%).

In contrast, France displayed a distinct energy landscape. Nuclear power claimed the highest proportion at 13.7%, surpassing both conventional thermal power and renewables (10.3%). Wind power (10.5%) and biomass (8.1%) made marginal contributions, while hydroelectric power stood out as the leading source, six times greater than the combined share of wind and biomass.

These charts provide valuable insights into the divergent energy profiles of Germany and France. While Germany relied heavily on conventional thermal power, France's energy generation predominantly centered around nuclear power. Renewable sources played a more substantial role in Germany, with biomass and wind power making noteworthy contributions. On the other hand, France relied on hydroelectric power as the primary renewable energy source.

Overall, these charts offer a comprehensive overview of the energy generation composition in Germany and France in 2009, shedding light on their unique energy strategies and highlighting the disparities between the two nations.

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