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Task-1

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Ms Kanak 26-07-23  MT 09

Original Text

The given pie chart vividly portrays the main reasons behind land degradation, making it less productive. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

No grammatical errors.

Improved

Improved version:

The pie chart clearly illustrates the primary causes of land degradation, leading to a decrease in productivity.

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Original Text

Similarly, the table provides a comprehensive overview of how the three regions of the world are adversely affected by these causes during the 1990s. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Similarly, the table provides a comprehensive overview of how the three regions of the world were adversely affected by these causes during the 1990s. 


Explanation: 


 Change "are" to "were" to match the past tense of "affected" .

Improved

Improved version:

The accompanying table provides a comprehensive overview of how these causes adversely affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. 

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Original Text

As can be seen from the graph, overgrazing the main cause behind worldwide land degradation, over 35% of the land is degraded by overgrazing, including countries like Oceania, in which 11.3% is degraded by herbivores, and similarly its contribution in Europe is 5.5% of the total land degraded.

Corrected

Corrected version:

As can be seen from the graph, overgrazing is the main cause behind worldwide land degradation. Over 35% of the land is degraded by overgrazing, including countries like Oceania, where 11.3% is degraded by herbivores. Similarly, its contribution in Europe is 5.5% of the total land degraded. 

Explanation: 

Rephrase the sentence to clarify the subject and improve clarity.

Improved

Improved version:

Overgrazing emerges as the main cause of global land degradation, with more than 35% of land being affected by this factor. For instance, in Oceania, 11.3% of the land is degraded due to overgrazing by herbivores, while in Europe, this contribution is 5.5% of the total degraded land. 

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Original Text

Deforestation is the second major issue, contributing to soil erosion. 30% of the total land is degraded by cutting away of trees.

Corrected

Corrected version:

30% of the total land is degraded by the cutting away of trees. 


Explanation:

Add "the" before "cutting away" for proper noun phrase.

Improved

Improved version:

Deforestation is the second major issue, leading to soil erosion and contributing to approximately 30% of total land degradation.

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Original Text

It has adversely affected Europe by degrading 9.8% of the 23% spoilt land, while it has less effect on North America and Oceania.

Corrected

Corrected version:

It has adversely affected Europe by degrading 9.8% of the 23% spoiled land, while it has less effect on North America and Oceania. 


Explanation: 


Change "spoilt" to "spoiled" to use the correct past participle form.

Improved

Improved version:

This has had a significant impact on Europe, degrading 9.8% of the 23% of land that is spoiled, while having a lesser effect on North America and Oceania.

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Original Text

In the same manner, overgrazing has affected 25% of the total agricultural land, and it is evident from the graph that it has affected 11.3% of the land out of the 13% eroded land in Oceania.

Corrected

Corrected version:

No grammatical errors.

Improved

Improved version:

Similarly, overgrazing has affected 25% of the total agricultural land. The graph clearly shows that it has affected 11.3% of the 13% of eroded land in Oceania.

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Original Text

To conclude, the presented table summaries that North America has the least percentage of degraded land while Europe has the most degraded land for agriculture.

Corrected

Corrected version:

To conclude, the presented table summarizes that North America has the least percentage of degraded land while Europe has the most degraded land for agriculture. 


Explanation: 


Change "summaries" to "summarizes" to match the subject-verb agreement.

Improved

Improved version:

In summary, the presented table highlights that North America has the lowest percentage of degraded land, while Europe has the highest percentage of degraded land for agriculture.

Original Text

Specifically, overgrazing and deforestation are the major contributors in soil erosion, making the land available less productive.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Specifically, overgrazing and deforestation are the major contributors to soil erosion, making the land less productive. 


Explanation: 


Change "in" to "to" to show the cause and effect relationship.

Improved

Improved version:

Specifically, overgrazing and deforestation are the major contributors to soil erosion, resulting in decreased productivity of the available land.

Source: Ms Kanak 26-07-23  MT 09

Original Text!

The given pie chart vividly portrays the main reasons behind land degradation , making it less productive. Similarly, the table provides a comprehensive overview of how the three regions of the world are adversely affected by these causes during the 1990s.

As can be seen from the graph, overgrazing the main cause behind worldwide land degradation, over 35% of the land is degraded by overgrazing, including countries like Oceania, in which 11.3% is degraded by herbivores, and similarly its contribution in Europe is 5.5% of the total land degraded. 

Deforestation is the second major issue, contributing to soil erosion. 30% of the total land is degraded by cutting away of trees. It has adversely affected Europe by degrading 9.8% of the 23% spoilt land, while it has less effect on the North-America, and Oceania. In the same manner, over grazing has affected 25% of the total agricultural land, and it is evident from the graph that it has affected 11.3% of the land out of 13% eroded land in Oceania.

To conclude, the presented table summaries that North America has the least percentage of degraded land while Europe has the most degraded land for agriculture. Specifically, over-grazing and deforestation are the major contributors in soil erosion, making the land available less productive.

Corrected!

The given pie chart vividly portrays the main reasons behind land degradation, making it less productive. Similarly, the table provides a comprehensive overview of how the three regions of the world are adversely affected by these causes during the 1990s.


As can be seen from the graph, overgrazing is the main cause behind worldwide land degradation, with over 35% of the land being degraded by overgrazing. This includes countries like Oceania, where 11.3% of the land is degraded by herbivores, and similarly, its contribution in Europe is 5.5% of the total land degraded.


Deforestation is the second major issue, contributing to soil erosion. 30% of the total land is degraded by the cutting away of trees. It has adversely affected Europe by degrading 9.8% of the 23% of spoilt land, while it has less effect on North America and Oceania. Similarly, overgrazing has affected 25% of the total agricultural land, and it is evident from the graph that it has affected 11.3% of the land out of the 13% eroded land in Oceania.


In conclusion, the presented table summarizes that North America has the least percentage of degraded land, while Europe has the most degraded land for agriculture. Specifically, overgrazing and deforestation are the major contributors to soil erosion, making the land less productive.

IMPROVED VERSION

The given pie chart illustrates the primary causes of land degradation, leading to a decrease in productivity. Similarly, the accompanying table provides a comprehensive overview of how these causes adversely affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.


It is evident from the graph that overgrazing is the main cause of global land degradation, with more than 35% of land being affected by this factor. For example, in Oceania, 11.3% of the land is degraded due to overgrazing by herbivores, while in Europe, this contribution is 5.5% of the total degraded land.


Deforestation emerges as the second major issue, leading to soil erosion and contributing to approximately 30% of total land degradation. This has had a significant impact on Europe, degrading 9.8% of the 23% of land that is spoiled, while having a lesser effect on North America and Oceania. Similarly, overgrazing has affected 25% of the total agricultural land. The graph clearly shows that it has affected 11.3% of the 13% of eroded land in Oceania.

In summary, the presented table highlights that North America has the lowest percentage of degraded land, while Europe has the highest percentage of degraded land for agriculture. Specifically, overgrazing and deforestation are the major contributors to soil erosion, resulting in decreased productivity of the available land.

Key Phrases and Vocabulary