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Source: Anuj Kumar 24-6-23 Day 12
Original Text
"This given pie chart shows electricity production in Germany and France through all kind of source and specially show renewable source of electric power."
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Corrected version:
This given pie chart shows electricity production in Germany and France through all kinds of sources and specifically shows renewable sources of electric power.
Error: "all kind of source" should be "all kinds of sources."
Explanation: "Source" is singular, so it should be changed to the plural form "sources" to match the subject.
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Improved version:
This pie chart illustrates the electricity production in both Germany and France across various sources, with a particular focus on renewable energy.
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"Firstly, we discuss about electricity production in Germany."
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Corrected version:
"Firstly, let's discuss electricity production in Germany."
Error: "discuss about" should be "discuss."
Explanation:
The word "about" is unnecessary in this context. "Discuss" alone is sufficient to convey the intended meaning.
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Firstly, let us delve into the topic of electricity production in Germany.
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"In 2009, Germany has generated total 3 type of energy: first conventional thermal, second nuclear energy, and last one was renewable source of energy."
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"In 2009, Germany generated a total of three types of energy: the first one being conventional thermal, the second one being nuclear energy, and the last one being renewable sources of energy."
Error: "has generated total 3 type of energy" should be "generated a total of three types of energy."
Explanation:
The verb "has generated" should be changed to "generated" to match the past tense of the sentence. Additionally, "total 3 type of energy" should be "a total of three types of energy" to use proper article and plural forms.
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In 2009, Germany successfully generated a diverse range of three energy types: namely conventional thermal, nuclear, and renewable sources.
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"In all of these, conventional thermal had huge shares 59.6%."
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"Among these, conventional thermal energy had a significant share of 59.6%."
Error: "had huge shares" should be "had a significant share."
Explanation:
The phrase "had huge shares" lacks specificity. It can be rephrased as "had a significant share" to convey a clearer meaning.
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Notably, conventional thermal energy accounted for a substantial share of 59.6% among these sources.
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"Nuclear energy with 23% had 2nd place in production of energy."
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"Nuclear energy, with 23%, secured the second place in energy production."
Error: "Nuclear energy with 23% had 2nd place in production of energy" should be "Nuclear energy, with 23%, secured the second place in energy production."
Explanation:
The original sentence lacks proper punctuation and structure. By adding commas and restructuring the sentence, the meaning becomes clearer and easier to understand.
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Nuclear energy secured the second position in energy production, with a notable contribution of 23%.
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"Rest other sources of energy had last place with 17.4%."
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Corrected version:
"The remaining sources of energy took the last place with 17.4%."
Error: "Rest other sources of energy had last place" should be "The remaining sources of energy took the last place."
Explanation:
The phrase "rest other sources of energy" is grammatically incorrect. "The remaining sources of energy" is a more appropriate phrase to describe the subject of the sentence.
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The remaining sources of energy collectively held the last position, contributing 17.4%.
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Original Text
"But renewable source of energy had four types source: Biomass 39.3%, wind power 36.9%, hydroelectric 17.7% and solar 6.1%."
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Corrected version:
"However, renewable sources of energy consisted of four types: biomass at 39.3%, wind power at 36.9%, hydroelectric at 17.7%, and solar at 6.1%."
Error: "four types source" should be "four types of sources."
Explanation:
The phrase "four types source" lacks the necessary preposition "of" to indicate possession. It should be "four types of sources" to convey the intended meaning.
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In contrast, renewable energy sources in Germany encompassed four distinct categories: biomass (39.3%), wind power (36.9%), hydroelectric power (17.7%), and solar power (6.1%).
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Here was the biomas power which is largest shareholder of renewable energy."
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"Here, biomass power was the largest shareholder of renewable energy."
Error: "Here was the biomas power" should be "Here, biomass power was."
Explanation:
The sentence structure is incorrect. Adding a comma after "Here" and rephrasing the sentence clarifies the subject-verb agreement and improves readability.
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Among these, biomass emerged as the largest contributor to the overall share of renewable energy.
Specifically focusing on biomass power, it represented the dominant stakeholder within the realm of renewable energy.
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"On the other hand, France produce 510 billion kilowatt electricity in 2009."
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Corrected version:
"On the other hand, France produced 510 billion kilowatts of electricity in 2009."
Error: "France produce" should be "France produced."
Explanation:
The verb "produce" should be in the past tense to match the timeframe mentioned in the sentence.
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Shifting our attention to France, the country generated a substantial amount of 510 billion kilowatts of electricity in 2009.
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"It had 3 types of energy: nuclear 76%, renewable 13.7% and conventional thermal 10.3%."
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Corrected version:
"It had three types of energy: nuclear at 76%, renewable at 13.7%, and conventional thermal at 10.3%."
Error: "nuclear 76%" should be "nuclear at 76%," "renewable 13.7%" should be "renewable at 13.7%," and "conventional thermal 10.3%" should be "conventional thermal at 10.3%."
Explanation:
When mentioning percentages, it is common to use the preposition "at" to indicate the proportion or rate of something.
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France's energy production can be categorized into three primary types: nuclear energy (76%), renewable energy (13.7%), and conventional thermal energy (10.3%).
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"Renewable source of energy have had only three types of source as compare Germany had four types renewable source of energy."
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Corrected version:
"Renewable sources of energy had only three types, whereas Germany had four types of renewable sources of energy."
Error: "Renewable source of energy have had" should be "Renewable sources of energy had," and "as compare Germany" should be "whereas Germany."
Explanation:
The subject-verb agreement is incorrect in the original sentence. "Renewable sources of energy" is plural and should take the verb "had." Additionally, "as compare Germany" should be replaced with "whereas Germany" to provide a clearer comparison between the two countries.
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In comparison to Germany's four types of renewable energy, France had a narrower range, consisting of three sources.
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"Hydroelectric was on top into 2009 with 80.5%, wind energy had 10.5% and the lowest producer of this types of power was wind with 8.1%."
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Corrected version:
"Hydroelectric was the highest at 80.5% in 2009, followed by wind energy at 10.5%, and the lowest producer of this type of power was solar at 8.1%."
Error: "Hydroelectric was on top into 2009" should be "Hydroelectric was the highest at 80.5% in 2009," and "the lowest producer of this types of power was wind" should be "the lowest producer of this type of power was solar."
Explanation:
The phrase "on top into 2009" is unclear and should be replaced with "the highest at 80.5% in 2009" to convey the intended meaning. Additionally, the sentence mistakenly states that wind was the lowest producer, while the data shows that solar had the lowest percentage.
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Improved version:
Hydroelectric power emerged as the leading energy source in 2009, accounting for 80.5% of France's total energy production. Wind energy followed with a contribution of 10.5%, while solar power represented the lowest producer within this category, contributing only 8.1% of the total energy generated.
Source: Anuj Kumar 24-6-23 Day 12
Original Text!
This given pie chart so electricity production in Germany and France through all kind of source and specially show renewable source of electric power
Firstly we discuss about electricity production in Germany. In 2009 Germany has generated total 3 type of energy first conventional thermal second nuclear energy and last one was renewable source of energy. In all of these conventional thermal had huge shares 59.6% nuclear energy with 23% had 2nd place in production of energy rest other sources of energy had last place with 17.4%, but renewable source of energy had four types source which was Biomass 39.3%, wind power 36.9%, hydroelectric 17.7% and solar 6.1%. Here was the biomas power which is largest shareholder of renewable energy.
On the other hand France produce 510 billion kilowatt electricity in 2009. It had Thi types of energy nuclear 76% renewable 13.7% and conventional thermal 10.3%. Renewable source of energy have had only three types of source as compare Germany had four types renewable source of energy hydroelectric was on top into 2009 with 80.5%, wind energy had 10.5% and the lowest producer of this types of power was wind with 8.1%
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This given pie chart shows electricity production in Germany and France through all kinds of sources and especially shows renewable sources of electric power.
Firstly, we discuss electricity production in Germany. In 2009, Germany generated a total of three types of energy: first, conventional thermal energy; second, nuclear energy; and lastly, renewable sources of energy. In all of these, conventional thermal had huge shares: 59.6%; nuclear energy, with 23%, had 2nd place in the production of energy; the rest of the other sources of energy had last place with 17.4%; but renewable sources of energy had four types: biomass (39.3%), wind power (36.9%), hydroelectric (17.7%), and solar (6.1%). Here was biomass power, which is the largest shareholder in renewable energy.
On the other hand, France produced 510 billion kilowatts of electricity in 2009. It had two types of energy: nuclear (76%), renewable (13.7%), and conventional thermal (10.3%). Renewable sources of energy have only had three types of sources, compared Germany had four types of renewable sources of energy in 2009: hydroelectric was on top with 80.5%, wind energy had 10.5%, and the lowest producer of these types of power was wind with 8.1%.
IMPROVED VERSION!
The provided pie chart offers a comprehensive overview of electricity production in both Germany and France, highlighting various sources and placing a special emphasis on renewable energy.
Beginning with Germany, a closer examination reveals a diverse energy landscape in 2009. Notably, the country generated three distinct types of energy: conventional thermal, nuclear, and renewable. Among these sources, conventional thermal energy emerged as the largest contributor, commanding a significant share of 59.6%. Nuclear energy secured the second position, accounting for 23% of the overall energy production, while the remaining sources collectively held the last place, contributing 17.4%. What sets Germany apart is its robust portfolio of renewable energy sources. Biomass took the lead, claiming 39.3% of the renewable energy share, closely followed by wind power at 36.9%. Hydroelectric power accounted for 17.7%, and solar power represented 6.1% of the renewable energy generated.
Turning our attention to France, the country produced a substantial amount of 510 billion kilowatts of electricity in the same year. France's energy production primarily relied on three categories: nuclear energy dominated with an impressive 76% share, renewable energy accounted for 13.7%, and conventional thermal energy contributed 10.3%. While France had a narrower range of renewable energy sources compared to Germany, hydroelectric power stood out as the undisputed leader, claiming an overwhelming majority of 80.5% of the total energy production. Wind energy followed at 10.5%, while solar power ranked the lowest within this category, contributing a mere 8.1% to the energy mix. These figures reflect the unique energy landscapes of both countries and highlight their varying approaches to electricity generation and the utilization of renewable resources.