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Task-1

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

1

Source: Ms Shraddha 16-08-23  MT 14

Original Text

The provided graph gives a comprehensive overview of the the number of social networking sites used by individuals in Canada spanning the period between 2014 and 2015. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The provided graph gives a comprehensive overview of the number of social networking sites used by individuals in Canada spanning the period between 2014 and 2015. 

Explanation: 

The word "the" is repeated twice in the original sentence, which is grammatically incorrect. It should be removed to make the sentence grammatically correct.

Improved

Improved version:

The provided graph offers a comprehensive overview of the number of social networking sites used by individuals in Canada from 2014 to 2015.

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Original Text

Overall, in 2014, the percentage of one site used in Canada was (36%). 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Overall, in 2014, the percentage of  one site used in Canada was 36%.


Explanation: 


The parentheses around the percentage value are unnecessary and should be removed to make the sentence grammatically correct. 

Improved

Improved version:

Overall, in 2014, a significant proportion of individuals in Canada (36%) utilized only one social networking site.

3

Original Text

First, in 2014, no sites’ percentage stood at 22%. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

First, in 2014, the percentage of no sites stood at 22%. 

Explanation: 


The possessive form of "sites" is incorrect in the original sentence. It should be "the percentage of no sites" to indicate the percentage of sites.

Improved

Improved version:

Initially, in 2014, the percentage of individuals who did not engage with any social networking sites stood at 22%.

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Original Text

Next year, in 2015, the percentage was decreased by 1%, (21%). 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Next year, in 2015, the percentage decreased by 1% to 21%. 


Explanation:

The use of parentheses to indicate the new percentage is unnecessary and should be removed. Additionally, the word "was" should be replaced with "decreased" to make the sentence grammatically correct.

Improved

Improved version:

The following year, 2015, witnessed a slight decrease in this percentage, dropping to 21%. 

5

Original Text

Furthermore, 36% of people used one side, in 2014. After this year, usage of one site dropped to 28%.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Furthermore, in 2014, 36% of people used one site. After that year, usage of one site dropped to 28%. 


Explanation: 


The word "side" in the original sentence should be replaced with "site" to make the sentence grammatically correct. Additionally, the placement of the phrase "in 2014" should be adjusted for clarity. The phrase "this year" in the original sentence should be replaced with "that year" to indicate a specific year (2014) mentioned earlier. 

Improved

Improved version:

 Furthermore, in 2014, a considerable portion (36%) of people in Canada used only one social networking site. However, in the subsequent year, this usage declined to 28%. 

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Original Text

Moreover, in 2014, two sites percentage was at 23%. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Moreover, in 2014, the percentage of two sites was 23%.

Explanation:

The word order in the original sentence is incorrect. It should be "the percentage of two sites" to indicate the percentage of sites.

Improved

Improved version:

Moreover, in 2014, 23% of individuals in Canada utilized two social networking sites. 

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Original Text

In 2015, it increased by 1%, 24%. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In 2015, it increased by 1% to 24%. 


Explanation: 


The use of a comma between the percentage values is unnecessary and should be replaced with "to" to indicate the increase from one percentage to another.

Improved

Improved version:

By 2015, this percentage increased slightly to 24%. 

8

Original Text

Turning to three sites, in 2014, first it stood at 12% after that, in 2015, it went up widely from 16%.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Turning to three sites, in 2014, the percentage stood at 12%. After that, in 2015, it increased significantly to 16%. 


Explanation: 


The original sentence lacks proper punctuation and clarity. The word "percentage" should be included to indicate what is being referred to. Additionally, the phrase "went up widely" should be replaced with "increased significantly" for better clarity. 

Improved

Improved version:

Turning to the usage of three social networking sites, the proportion stood at 12% in 2014. However, in 2015, it experienced a significant increase, reaching 16%. 

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Original Text

However, turning to four sites, in 2014, the proportion of people used four sites, that was only 5%.

Corrected

Corrected version:

However, in 2014, the proportion of people who used four sites was only 5%. 


Explanation: 


The word order in the original sentence is incorrect. It should be "the proportion of people who used four sites" to indicate the group being referred to. Additionally, the phrase "that was" is unnecessary and should be removed. 

Improved

Improved version:

In contrast, the proportion of individuals who used four social networking sites in 2014 was only 5%. 

10

Original Text

In 2018, it was dramatically increased to 8%. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In 2015, it dramatically increased to 8%. 


Explanation: 


The year mentioned in the original sentence is incorrect. It should be "In 2015" to match the context of the sentence.

Improved

Improved version:

However, by 2015, this proportion dramatically rose to 8%. 

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Original Text

Five sites before 2015 was at 2% and later 4%, in 2015. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The percentage of people using five sites before 2015 was 2% and later increased to 4% in 2015.


Explanation: 


The original sentence lacks clarity and proper grammar. The phrase "Five sites before 2015" should be rephrased to "The percentage of people using five sites before 2015" for clarity. Additionally, the phrase "and later 4%" should be adjusted to indicate the increase in percentage.

Improved

Improved version:

The usage of five social networking sites before 2015 was at 2%, but it later increased to 4% in 2015.

Source: Ms Shraddha 16-08-23  MT 14

Original Text!

The provided graph gives a comprehensive overview of the the number of social networking sites used by individuals in Canada spanning the period between 2014 and 2015. 

Overall, in 2014, the percentage of one site used in Canada was (36%).

First, in 2014, no sites’ percentage stood at 22%. Next year, in 2015, the percentage was decreased by 1%, (21%). Furthermore, 36% of people used one side, in 2014. After this year, usage of one site dropped to 28%. Moreover, in 2014, two sites percentage was at 23%. In 2015, it increased by 1%, 24%. 

Turning to three sites, in 2014, first it stood at 12% after that, in 2015, it went up widely from 16%. However, turning to four sites, in 2014, the proportion of people used four sites, that was only 5%. In 2018, it was dramatically increased to 8%. Five sites before 2015 was at 2% and later 4%, in 2015. 

In conclusion, in 2014 and 2015, the trend was went up and down wildely.

Corrected!

The provided graph gives a comprehensive overview of the number of social networking sites used by individuals in Canada spanning the period between 2014 and 2015. 

Overall, in 2014, the percentage of one site used in Canada was 36%. 

First, in 2014, the percentage of no sites stood at 22%. The next year, in 2015, the percentage decreased by 1% to 21%. Furthermore, 36% of people used one site in 2014. After this year, the usage of one site dropped to 28%. Moreover, in 2014, the percentage of two sites used was 23%. In 2015, it increased by 1% to 24%. 

Turning to three sites, in 2014, it stood at 12%. After that, in 2015, it increased widely to 16%. However, when it comes to four sites, in 2014, the proportion of people who used four sites was only 5%. In 2015, it dramatically increased to 8%. The percentage of people using five sites before 2015 was 2% and later increased to 4% in 2015. 

In conclusion, in 2014 and 2015, the trend went up and down wildly.

IMPROVED VERSION

  The presented graph provides a comprehensive overview of the number of social networking sites used by individuals in Canada from 2014 to 2015.
     Overall, in 2014, a significant proportion of individuals in Canada (36%) utilized only one social networking site. Initially, in 2014, the percentage of individuals who did not engage with any social networking sites stood at 22%. The following year, 2015, witnessed a slight decrease in this percentage, dropping to 21%.
     Furthermore, in 2014, a considerable portion (36%) of people in Canada used only one social networking site. However, in the subsequent year, this usage declined to 28%. Moreover, in 2014, 23% of individuals in Canada utilized two social networking sites. By 2015, this percentage increased slightly to 24%.
      Turning to the usage of three social networking sites, the proportion stood at 12% in 2014. However, in 2015, it experienced a significant increase, reaching 16%. In contrast, the proportion of individuals who used four social networking sites in 2014 was only 5%. However, by 2015, this proportion dramatically rose to 8%. The usage of five social networking sites before 2015 was at 2%, but it later increased to 4% in 2015.
      In summary, the trend of social networking site usage in Canada exhibited significant fluctuations between 2014 and 2015.

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