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Task-1

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Mr Nasir Hussain 15-07-23 MT 12

Original Text

The diagram provides an overview of aluminium recycle process. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The diagram provides an overview of the aluminium recycling process. 

Explanation: 

"Recycle" should be corrected to "recycling" to maintain grammatical consistency.

Improved

Improved version:

The provided diagram offers a comprehensive overview of the highly efficient aluminium recycling process.

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Original Text

It depics that how used cans can be recycled. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

It depicts how used cans can be recycled. 

Explanation: 

"Depics" should be corrected to "depicts" to use the correct form of the verb.

Improved

Improved version:

It vividly portrays the sequential steps involved in the recycling of used cans, highlighting their transformation into valuable resources. 

3

Original Text

The process consist of 6 stages in which used cans are recycled. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The process consists of 6 stages in which used cans are recycled. 

Explanation: 

"Consist" should be corrected to "consists" to agree with the subject "process."

Improved

Improved version:

The intricate process encompasses six distinct stages meticulously designed to ensure the optimal recycling of used aluminium cans. 

4

Original Text

The chart Illustrates that used cans are thrown in a dustbin, which is separate from only aluminium cans after that it is collected by a truck, which goes to recycling factory. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The chart illustrates that used cans are thrown in a dustbin, which is separate from only aluminium cans. After that, they are collected by a truck, which goes to a recycling factory. 

Explanation: 

The sentence was too long and lacked proper punctuation. It has been divided into two sentences for clarity. Additionally, "it" has been replaced with "they" to refer to the used cans.

Improved

Improved version:

The chart visually represents the initial phase where used cans are discarded into designated bins solely dedicated to aluminium recycling, emphasizing the importance of proper waste segregation.

Following this, a specialized collection truck meticulously gathers the cans, transporting them to a state-of-the-art recycling facility with utmost care and precision.

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Original Text

Then they are well cleaned and stored. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Then, they are well cleaned and stored. 

Explanation: 

A comma is needed after the introductory adverb "then" to separate it from the rest of the sentence.

Improved

Improved version:

Upon arrival at the facility, the cans undergo a rigorous cleaning process and are methodically stored in preparation for subsequent treatment.

6

Original Text

subsequently, the process of shading and compressing takes place. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Subsequently, the process of shredding and compressing takes place. 

Explanation: 

"Shading" should be corrected to "shredding" to accurately describe the process.

Improved

Improved version:

Subsequently, the cans are subjected to an advanced shredding and compressing process, significantly reducing their volume and facilitating subsequent manufacturing steps. 

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Original Text

Added to this, it is heated under a large flame and melted to mould. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Additionally, it is heated under a large flame and melted to mold. 

Explanation: 

"Added to this" can be replaced with "additionally" for clearer and more concise phrasing. "Mould" should be corrected to "mold" for the appropriate spelling in American English.

Improved

Improved version:

The shredded aluminium is then subjected to high temperatures, causing it to melt and transform into a malleable state, ready for further processing. 

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Original Text

After that it is rolled in a thik roll, having breadth of 2.5 mm and thickness of 6 mm, it makes their task easy. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

After that, it is rolled into a thick roll, with a breadth of 2.5 mm and a thickness of 6 mm, which makes the task easier. 

Explanation: 

A comma is needed after the introductory phrase "After that" to separate it from the rest of the sentence. "Thik" should be corrected to "thick." The phrase "it makes their task easy" is ambiguous, so it has been rephrased to "which makes the task easier."

Improved

Improved version:

The molten aluminium is expertly shaped into robust rolls, boasting a precise breadth of 2.5 mm and an ideal thickness of 6 mm, streamlining the manufacturing process and ensuring consistency. 

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Original Text

Then it is given a shape of new can which is ready to use, the cans are also labelled by company and liquid is filled in them. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Then it is given the shape of a new can, which is ready to use. The cans are also labeled by the company, and liquid is filled in them. 

Explanation:

 The sentence was too long and lacked proper punctuation. It has been divided into three sentences for clarity. "A shape of new can" should be corrected to "the shape of a new can." 

Improved

Improved version:

These rolls are skillfully utilized to create brand new cans, meticulously labeled by the company, and carefully filled with liquid to fulfill their intended purpose. 

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Original Text

It also indicates that the UK has registered a record of 74% recycled cans, it is beneficial for environment. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

It also indicates that the UK has registered a record of 74% recycled cans, which is beneficial for the environment.

Explanation: 

The second part of the sentence lacks a subject and verb. It has been modified to add the relative pronoun "which" to connect the clause "which is beneficial for the environment" to the main sentence.

Improved

Improved version:

Moreover, the data presented indicates a remarkable achievement by the UK, with a record-breaking 74% of cans being successfully recycled—an exemplary contribution to environmental sustainability and preservation. 

Source: Mr Nasir Hussain 15-07-23 MT 12

Original Text!

The diagram provides an overview of aluminium recycle process. It depics that how used cans can be recycled. The process consist of 6 stages in which used cans are recycled.

The chart Illustrates that used cans are thrown in a dustbin, which is separate from only aluminium cans after that it is collected by a truck, which goes to recycling factory. Then they are well cleaned and stored. subsequently, the process of shading and compressing takes place.

Added to this, it is heated under a large flame and melted to mould. After that it is rolled in a thik roll, having breadth of 2.5 mm and thickness of 6 mm, it makes their task easy. Then it is given a shape of new can which is ready to use, the cans are also labelled by company and  liquid is filled in them. 

It also indicates that the UK has registered a record of 74% recycled cans, it is beneficial for environment.

Corrected!

The diagram provides an overview of the aluminium recycling process. It depicts how used cans can be recycled. The process consists of six stages in which used cans are recycled.

The chart illustrates that used cans are thrown into a dustbin, which is separate from other waste, specifically for aluminium cans. After that, they are collected by a truck that goes to a recycling factory. Then, they are thoroughly cleaned and stored. Subsequently, the process of shredding and compressing takes place.

Additionally, the shredded aluminium is heated under a large flame and melted to be molded. After that, it is rolled into a thick roll with a breadth of 2.5 mm and a thickness of 6 mm, which facilitates the subsequent steps. Then, it is given the shape of a new can that is ready to use. The cans are also labeled by the company, and liquid is filled in them.

Furthermore, the text indicates that the UK has achieved a record of recycling 74% of its cans, which is beneficial for the environment.

IMPROVED VERSION

The provided diagram provides a detailed overview of the highly efficient aluminium recycling process, illustrating the various stages involved from the initial collection of used cans to the production of new cans ready for use. Overall, the process can be divided into six distinct stages, each serving a specific purpose in ensuring the effective recycling of aluminium cans. 

To begin with, used cans are segregated from other types of waste and deposited in dedicated dustbins, ensuring proper separation for recycling purposes. Once collected, these cans are transported by specialized trucks to recycling factories, where they undergo thorough cleaning to remove any impurities. Following the cleaning process, the cans are carefully stored, awaiting further processing. The subsequent stages involve shredding and compressing the cleaned cans, transforming them into small fragments for easier handling and preparation. 

Next, the shredded aluminium undergoes a heating process, during which it is melted and molded into a specific shape, forming a thin sheet with a breadth of 2.5 mm and a thickness of 6 mm. This malleable sheet is then rolled to facilitate its utilization in the production of new cans, streamlining the manufacturing process. Afterwards, the newly shaped cans are labeled by the respective companies, ensuring proper identification and product information for consumers. 

Finally, the cans are filled with various liquids, completing the recycling process and making them ready for distribution and use. Remarkably, the data presented in the chart indicates that the United Kingdom has achieved an impressive recycling rate of 74% for aluminium cans, showcasing the nation's commitment to environmental sustainability and resource conservation.

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