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Task-2

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Mr Bhavyansh  MT 12

Original Text

Eating habits of people, without a doubt, has significantly shifted in the past 20 years.

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Corrected version:

The eating habits of people, without a doubt, have significantly shifted in the past 20 years.


Explanation:


"Eating habits" is a plural subject, so "have" should be used instead of "has" to agree in number. 

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Improved version:

The dietary preferences of individuals have undeniably undergone profound transformations over the past two decades.

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Notably, the fast-paced lifestyle has led to people eating more and more fast food at the expense of more traditional meals.

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Notably, the fast-paced lifestyle has led people to eat more and more fast food at the expense of traditional meals. 

Explanation: 

The verb "led" should be followed by the base form of the verb "eat," and the article "the" before "traditional meals" is not necessary.

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Significantly, the relentless pace of modern life has propelled a surge in fast-food consumption, often at the expense of traditional, nutritionally balanced meals. 

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Original Text

There are only few upsites of consuming fast cooked meals.

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Corrected version:

There are only a few upsides to consuming fast-cooked meals.

Explanation: 

"Few" should be preceded by the indefinite article "a," and "upsides" should be used instead of "upsites." Additionally, "fast-cooked" should be hyphenated for clarity. 

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Nevertheless, from my perspective, the detrimental consequences of excessive fast-food consumption far outweigh any potential advantages. 

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Original Text

The first and foremost benefit is that they are more accessible and budget-friendly, making it a popular choice for individuals searching for quick and economical meals.

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This sentence is already grammatically correct. 

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One pivotal merit lies in the cost-effectiveness and widespread availability of fast-cooked meals, making them an appealing choice for individuals seeking swift and economical dining solutions. 

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Original Text

Another advantage of consuming fast food is the vast range of variety available, enabling individuals to satisfy their specific carvings, which may lack in traditional meals.

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Corrected version:

Another advantage of consuming fast food is the vast range of variety available, enabling individuals to satisfy their specific cravings, which may be lacking in traditional meals.

Explanation: 

"Carvings" should be corrected to "cravings," and "may lack" should be changed to "may be lacking" for gram matical accuracy. 

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Another notable perk associated with fast food is its extensive variety, allowing patrons to indulge their particular cravings, a facet frequently absent from conventional cuisine. 

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Original Text

According to the BBC reports, about 93% of the young generation, especially in developing countries such as USA, Japan, prioritise eating fast food over traditional food which is attributed to vibrant taste of instead cooked meals. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

According to BBC reports, about 93% of the young generation, especially in developing countries such as the USA and Japan, prioritise eating fast food over traditional food, which is attributed to the vibrant taste of instant cooked meals. 

Explanation: 

"The" should be added before "USA," and "BBC reports" doesn't require an article. "Instead" should be changed to "instant," and the sentence structure should be adjusted for clarity.

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Improved version:

According to reports from the BBC, an astonishing 93% of the younger generation, particularly in developing nations such as the USA and Japan, gravitate towards fast food due to the tantalising flavours and convenience of instant meals. 

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Original Text

 Despite a several advantages, the disadvantages of instant meals are multifaceted. 

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Corrected version:

Despite several advantages, the disadvantages of instant meals are multifaceted. 


Explanation: 

"A" should be removed before "several" since "advantages" is a plural noun.

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Improved version:

Notwithstanding several commendable attributes, the downsides of instant meals are multifaceted and demand close examination. 

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Original Text

As the evolution of food has declined the nutritional content of meals. In the contemporary landscape, the majority of meals consumed contains only 30% of nutritional value found in traditional food, ultimately causing severe health problems. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

As the evolution of food has decreased the nutritional content of meals. In the contemporary landscape, the majority of meals consumed contain only 30% of the nutritional value found in traditional food, ultimately causing severe health problems. 

Explanation: 

"Declined" should be changed to "decreased" to convey the intended meaning. "Contains" should be changed to "contain" to agree in number with the subject "the majority of meals." 

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Improved version:

As culinary evolution has led to a decline in the nutritional content of meals, the majority of dishes consumed today provide only 30% of the nutritional value present in traditional fare, thus giving rise to a multitude of severe health issues. 

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Original Text

The most profound drawback is its potential to lead weight gain and obesity. 

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Corrected version:

The most profound drawback is its potential to lead to weight gain and obesity.

Explanation: 

"Lead weight gain" should be changed to "lead to weight gain" to make the sentence grammatically correct.

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Improved version:

The most compelling drawback is the potential of fast food to contribute significantly to weight gain and the epidemic of obesity. 

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Original Text

The exacerbating factor is that obesity can be inviting for pelothra of diseases. 

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Corrected version:

The exacerbating factor is that obesity can invite a plethora of diseases. 

Explanation: 

"Pelothra" should be corrected to "plethora," and "inviting for" should be changed to "invite a" for grammatical accuracy.

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Furthermore, obesity serves as a harbinger of a myriad of diseases, further exacerbating the health hazards attributable to fast-food consumption.  

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Original Text

For instance, in City hospitals worldwide, the reported obesity cases surged by 85% in the last six years, making the impact of fast food evident. 

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Corrected version:

For instance, in city hospitals worldwide, reported obesity cases surged by 85% in the last six years, making the impact of fast food evident. 

Explanation: 

"City" should be lowercase, and "the" before "reported" is not necessary. Additionally, "the" before "last six years" can be omitted for smoother flow.

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A case in point can be observed in city hospitals worldwide, where reported cases of obesity have surged by a staggering 85% in the past six years, underscoring the far-reaching ramifications of fast food on public health. 

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Original Text

In conclusion, the upside of instead meals such as accessibility and affordability, are overshadowed by its profound cons.

Corrected

Corrected version:

In conclusion, the upside of instant meals, such as accessibility and affordability, is overshadowed by its profound cons. 

Explanation: 

"Instead" should be corrected to "instant," and the verb "is" should agree in number with the singular subject "the upside." Additionally, "such as" should be added for clarity.

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To summarise, while fast food does offer commendable traits such as accessibility and affordability, these advantages are eclipsed by its substantial drawbacks. 

Source: Mr Bhavyansh 18-09-23  MT 12

Original Text!


Eating habits of people, without a doubt, has significantly shifted in the past 20 years. Notably, the fast-paced lifestyle has led to people eating more and more fast food at the expense of more traditional meals. However, from my perspective, the disadvantages of eating more fast food outweigh its advantages.

There are only few upsites of consuming fast cooked meals. The first and foremost benefit is that they are more accessible and budget friendly, making it popular choice for individuals searching quick and economical meals. Another advantage of consuming fast food is the vast range of variety available, enabling individual to satisfy their specific carvings, which may lack in traditional meals. According to the BBC reports, about 93% of young generation, especially in developing countries such as USA, Japan, prioritise eating fast food over traditional food which is attributed to vibrant taste of instead cooked meals.

Despite a several advantages, the disadvantages of instant meals are multifaceted. As the evolution of food has declined the nutritional content of meals. In the contemporary landscape, the majority of meals consumed contains only 30% of nutritional value found in traditional food, ultimately causing severe health problems. The most profound drawback is its potential to lead weight gain and obesity. The exacerbating factor is that obesity can be inviting for pelothra of diseases. For instance, in City hospitals worldwide, the reported obesity cases surged by 85% in last six years, making the impact of fast food evident.

In conclusion, the upside of instead meals such as accessibility and affordability, are overshadowed by its profound cons.

Corrected!      

Eating habits of people, without a doubt, have significantly shifted in the past 20 years. Notably, the fast-paced lifestyle has led to people eating more and more fast food at the expense of more traditional meals. However, from my perspective, the disadvantages of eating more fast food outweigh its advantages.


  There are only a few upsides to consuming fast-cooked meals. The first and foremost benefit is that they are more accessible and budget-friendly, making them a popular choice for individuals searching for quick and economical meals. Another advantage of consuming fast food is the vast range of variety available, enabling individuals to satisfy their specific cravings, which may be lacking in traditional meals. According to BBC reports, about 93% of the young generation, especially in developing countries such as the USA and Japan, prioritize eating fast food over traditional food, which is attributed to the vibrant taste of instant cooked meals.


  Despite several advantages, the disadvantages of instant meals are multifaceted. As the evolution of food has progressed, the nutritional content of meals has declined. In the contemporary landscape, the majority of meals consumed contain only 30% of the nutritional value found in traditional food, ultimately causing severe health problems. The most profound drawback is its potential to lead to weight gain and obesity. The exacerbating factor is that obesity can invite a plethora of diseases. For instance, in city hospitals worldwide, the reported cases of obesity have surged by 85% in the last six years, making the impact of fast food evident.


In conclusion, the upsides of instant meals, such as accessibility and affordability, are overshadowed by their profound cons. 

IMPROVED VERSION

       Over the past few decades, there has been a notable shift in the dietary choices of individuals, which can be attributed to the fast-paced nature of contemporary society. The consumption of fast food has experienced a significant increase, frequently replacing conventional meals that are nutritionally well-rounded. This essay explores the intricate correlation between the benefits and drawbacks of fast food consumption, positing that although it provides ease of access and affordability, the significant health consequences outweigh its conveniences.


      The allure of fast food stems from its affordability and widespread accessibility, rendering it a practical selection for individuals in search of convenient and economical dining alternatives. Furthermore, the extensive array of menu options caters to a variety of palates, enabling customers to satisfy their specific culinary desires, a distinguishing feature that is less frequently encountered in traditional gastronomy. Based on reports from the BBC, a significant majority of the younger population, particularly in countries such as the United States and Japan, exhibit a strong preference for fast food. This preference is attributed to the appealing taste profiles and the convenience offered by fast food establishments.

 

      However, the disadvantages associated with the consumption of fast food are complex and require careful examination. The decline in nutritional content of meals resulting from culinary evolution has led to a significant reduction in the nutritional value of the majority of dishes consumed in contemporary times, with only approximately 30% of the nutritional value found in traditional fare. Consequently, this has given rise to a wide range of severe health issues. One of the primary disadvantages associated with fast food is its tendency to substantially contribute to weight gain and the pervasive problem of obesity. Moreover, obesity acts as a precursor for a multitude of diseases, thereby intensifying the health risks associated with the consumption of fast food. 


       A notable demonstration of this phenomenon can be witnessed in urban healthcare facilities across the globe, where documented instances of obesity have experienced a significant increase of 85% within the previous six-year period. The aforementioned trend highlights the extensive consequences of fast food on the overall well-being of the population, thereby emphasising the need to reassess one's dietary preferences.


      In summary, although fast food possesses certain commendable characteristics such as convenience and cost-effectiveness, the significant and wide-ranging disadvantages it entails outweigh these benefits. The increasing health issues linked to its intake require a renewed emphasis on advocating for more balanced dietary practises in order to protect the welfare of individuals and communities.