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Task-2

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Ms Lovepreet Kaur 22-07-23  MT 09

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In many ways, health plays an indispensable role in shaping our world. 

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In many aspects, health plays an integral role in shaping our society. 

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It can be seen that a large number of people suffer from overweight compared to the past. 

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It is evident that a significant proportion of the population is experiencing higher rates of obesity compared to the past. 

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This statement has some causes and a few effects in humans lives. 

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This statement has some causes and a few effects in human lives. 

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"Humans lives" should be corrected to "human lives." 

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This phenomenon can be attributed to several causes and has a range of effects on individuals' lives. 

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Certainly, the most important thing is that nowadays, most people have a hectic schedule. 

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Undoubtedly, one of the primary contributing factors is the increasingly hectic lifestyles that people lead in today's society. 

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In other words, they have no much time to make healthy food. 

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In other words, they do not have much time to make healthy food. 

Explanation: 


"No much time" should be corrected to "not much time."

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With limited time available, individuals struggle to prioritize preparing nutritious meals. 

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Due to this, they eat unhealthy food: junk food, packaged food, and many more. 

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Consequently, they resort to consuming unhealthy food options, such as fast food and packaged meals. 

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Moreover, the advancement of technology has also impact on individual lives because youngsters are addicted the usage of their electronic gadgets and do not exercise. 

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Moreover, the advancement of technology has also impacted individual lives because youngsters are addicted to the usage of their electronic gadgets and do not exercise. 


Explanation: 


"Has also impact" should be corrected to "has also impacted." 

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Additionally, the advancements in technology have had a profound impact on individuals, particularly the younger generation, who are heavily reliant on electronic gadgets and tend to lead sedentary lives. 

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Due to this, they ordered their food online from different websites such as Swiggy, Zomato, and Domino's, which means that they are sit on one place and do not move. 

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Due to this, they order their food online from different websites such as Swiggy, Zomato, and Domino's, which means that they sit in one place and do not move. 


Explanation: 


"Are sit" should be corrected to "sit." 

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This sedentary behavior further exacerbates the issue as individuals opt for online food delivery services, leading to a lack of physical activity and an increase in unhealthy eating habits.

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For example, in today's era, 38% of people suffer from obsity due to their unhealthy lifestyle. 

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For example, in today's era, 38% of people suffer from obesity due to their unhealthy lifestyle. 


Explanation: 


"Obsity" should be corrected to "obesity."

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As a result, the prevalence of obesity has reached alarming levels, with approximately 38% of the population affected by this condition.

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On the other hand, there are some impacts also. 

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Conversely, the consequences of this growing problem are significant. 

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The first concern is that youngsters suffer from many health problems such as heart disease, diabetes, and high blood pressure. 

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Young individuals, in particular, face a multitude of health issues, including heart disease, diabetes, and high blood pressure. 

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It is noteworthy that a substantial number of people prefer to eat fast food due to their sedentary lifestyle, which means that packaged food is dangerous for health because sometimes it is expired. 

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It is crucial to note that the preference for fast food among individuals with sedentary lifestyles poses a substantial risk to their health, as packaged food items can sometimes be expired or contain harmful ingredients. 

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In conclusion, the overweight problem is increasing day by day because excessive use of fast food and a hectic lifestyle. 

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In conclusion, the issue of obesity continues to escalate due to excessive consumption of fast food and the demanding nature of modern lifestyles. 

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However, it causes many health issues, such as heart attacks and diabetes. 

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This trend has far-reaching implications, leading to various health complications, such as heart attacks and diabetes. 

Source: Ms Lovepreet Kaur 22-07-23  MT 09

Original Text!

   In many ways, health plays an indispensable role in shaping our world. It can be seen that a large number of people suffer from overweight compared to the past. This statement has some causes and a few effects in humans lives.

Certainly, the most important thing is that nowadays, most people have a hectic schedule. In other words, they have no much time to make healthy food. Due to this, they eat unhealthy food: junk food, packaged food, and many more. Moreover, the advancement of technology has also impact on individual lives because youngsters are addicted the usage of their electronic gadgets and do not exercise. Due to this, they ordered their food online from different websites such as Swiggy, Zomato, and Domino's, which means that they are sit on one place and do not move. For example, in today's era, 38% of people suffer from obsity due to their unhealthy lifestyle.

On the other hand, there are some impacts also. The first concern is that youngsters suffer from many health problems such as heart disease, diabetes, and high blood pressure. It is noteworthy that a substantial number of people prefer to eat fast food due to their sedentary lifestyle, which means that packaged food is dangerous for health because sometimes it is expired.

In conclusion, the overweight problem is increasing day by day because excessive use of fast food and a hectic lifestyle. However, it causes many health issues, such as heart attacks and diabetes.

Corrected!

    In many ways, health plays an indispensable role in shaping our world. It can be seen that a large number of people suffer from obesity compared to the past. This statement has some causes and a few effects on humans' lives.

Certainly, the most important thing is that nowadays, most people have a hectic schedule. In other words, they do not have much time to make healthy food. Due to this, they eat unhealthy food: junk food, packaged food, and many more. Moreover, the advancement of technology has also impacted individual lives because youngsters are addicted to the usage of their electronic gadgets and do not exercise. Due to this, they order their food online from different websites such as Swiggy, Zomato, and Domino's, which means that they sit in one place and do not move. For example, in today's era, 38% of people suffer from obesity due to their unhealthy lifestyle.

On the other hand, there are also some impacts. The first concern is that youngsters suffer from many health problems such as heart disease, diabetes, and high blood pressure. It is noteworthy that a substantial number of people prefer to eat fast food due to their sedentary lifestyle, which means that packaged food is dangerous for health because sometimes it is expired.

In conclusion, the overweight problem is increasing day by day due to excessive use of fast food and a hectic lifestyle. However, it causes many health issues, such as heart attacks and diabetes.

IMPROVED VERSION

   In many aspects, health plays an integral role in shaping our society. It is evident that a significant proportion of the population is experiencing higher rates of obesity compared to the past. This phenomenon can be attributed to several causes and has a range of effects on individuals' lives.

Undoubtedly, one of the primary contributing factors is the increasingly hectic lifestyles that people lead in today's society. With limited time available, individuals struggle to prioritize preparing nutritious meals. Consequently, they resort to consuming unhealthy food options, such as fast food and packaged meals. Additionally, the advancements in technology have had a profound impact on individuals, particularly the younger generation, who are heavily reliant on electronic gadgets and tend to lead sedentary lives. This sedentary behavior further exacerbates the issue as individuals opt for online food delivery services, leading to a lack of physical activity and an increase in unhealthy eating habits. As a result, the prevalence of obesity has reached alarming levels, with approximately 38% of the population affected by this condition.

Conversely, the consequences of this growing problem are significant. Young individuals, in particular, face a multitude of health issues, including heart disease, diabetes, and high blood pressure. It is crucial to note that the preference for fast food among individuals with sedentary lifestyles poses a substantial risk to their health, as packaged food items can sometimes be expired or contain harmful ingredients.

In conclusion, the issue of obesity continues to escalate due to excessive consumption of fast food and the demanding nature of modern lifestyles. This trend has far-reaching implications, leading to various health complications, such as heart attacks and diabetes. It is imperative that individuals, as well as society as a whole, prioritize healthier habits and take proactive measures to address this pressing issue.

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Moreover, the advancement of technology has also impacted individual lives because youngsters are addicted to the usage of their electronic gadgets and do not exercise. 


Explanation: 


"Has also impact" should be corrected to "has also impacted."