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Task-2

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

1

Source: Mr Aniket Mehla 07-07-23  MT 05

Original Text

There is a little room for doubt that what are the main causes of the rising crime. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

There is little room for doubt about the main causes of rising crime.

Explanation: 

The original sentence is grammatically incorrect. "That what are" should be replaced with "about the," and "the rising crime" should be changed to "rising crime" for smoother phrasing.

Improved

Improved version:

There is little room for doubt regarding the primary factors contributing to the surge in criminal activities.

2

Original Text

There are many things which results in the happening of crime and many ways to prevent them. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

There are many factors that result in the occurrence of crime and many ways to prevent it. 


Explanation: 


The word "which" should be changed to "that" to introduce a defining clause. "Results" should be changed to "result" to match the plural subject "factors," and "them" should be changed to "it" to maintain subject-verb agreement. 

Improved

Improved version:

Various factors contribute to the prevalence of crime, and multiple strategies can be implemented to deter it.

3

Original Text

There are many reasons for increasing crime. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

There are many reasons for the increase in crime. 


Explanation: 


The phrase "increasing crime" should be changed to "increase in crime" to accurately convey the rise in criminal activities. 

Improved

Improved version:

Numerous factors contribute to the upward trend in criminal activity.

4

Original Text

One of the main reason is unemployment and poverty. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

One of the main reasons is unemployment and poverty. 

 

Explanation: 


The word "reason" should be changed to "reasons" to match the plural subject "One of the main reasons." 

Improved

Improved version:

Unemployment and poverty stand out as significant driving forces behind this issue. 

5

Original Text

As people do not have jobs. Even if they are educated, they don’t get jobs according to their qualifications, which leads in that people are forced to do robberies and theft, very poor people who do not have anything to even eat and don’t have shelters because their unemployed and this forced them to do something wrong to live in to survive. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Since people do not have jobs, even if they are educated, they struggle to find employment according to their qualifications. This circumstance compels people, particularly the extremely impoverished who lack basic necessities and shelter, to resort to criminal acts as a means of survival, including theft and robbery. 


Explanation: 


"As" should be changed to "since" to indicate a cause-and-effect relationship between the lack of jobs and the subsequent consequences. 

Improved

Improved version:

Despite their education, individuals often encounter challenges securing jobs that match their qualifications due to the prevailing unemployment. Consequently, individuals, especially those living in abject poverty without access to essential resources and shelter, are driven to engage in criminal activities such as theft and robbery for mere survival.

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Original Text

Another main reasons of crime is that people have anger issues and they don’t like if anyone do wrong they tease them which can result in a great fight or crime. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Another main reason for crime is that people have anger issues, and they don't like it when others do wrong, leading them to engage in teasing, which can result in significant conflicts or criminal acts.


Explanation: 


"Reasons" should be changed to "reason" to match the singular subject "Another main reason." The word "if" should be changed to "when" for proper conditional phrasing. The phrase "result in a great fight or crime" should be expanded and rephrased for clarity.

Improved

Improved version:

Additionally, widespread anger management issues contribute to criminal behavior, as individuals become easily provoked by perceived wrongdoings and engage in teasing, which can escalate into serious conflicts or criminal acts.

7

Original Text

To handle and to decrease the crime. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

To address and decrease crime.


Explanation: 


"Handle" should be changed to "address" for a more accurate and active verb choice.

Improved

Improved version:

Implementing comprehensive measures is imperative for effectively addressing and mitigating crime.

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Original Text

There are many ways that providing employment to the poor or the needy or to provide subsidies which helps them to even survive which can leads in reducing crime. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

There are many ways to reduce crime, such as providing employment opportunities for the poor and needy or offering subsidies to help them survive. 


Explanation: 


The sentence is structurally incorrect and contains multiple errors. "That providing employment" should be changed to "to provide employment" for smoother phrasing. "Which helps them to even survive" should be changed to "or offering subsidies to help them survive" to provide a clear and concise explanation of the suggested methods.

Improved

Improved version:

Adopting diverse strategies, including facilitating job opportunities and providing subsidies to assist vulnerable populations, significantly contribute to the decline in crime rates.

9

Original Text

Police should be well trained and brave and to give them orders to work hard and take very strict actions against the crime so that criminals should have fear in their minds before doing the crime and we have to be every time we fresh mind and not to tease or abuse anyone in anger always be positive note to give anyone hate speech and be friendly with everyone which definitely helps in reducing the crime. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Police should be well-trained and courageous. They should be given orders to work diligently and take strict actions against criminals, instilling fear in their minds. It is essential to maintain a fresh mind, avoiding teasing, abusive language, and hate speech in moments of anger. Always strive for a positive outlook and be friendly with everyone. These measures undoubtedly contribute to reducing crime. 


Explanation: 


The original sentence is excessively long and lacks proper structure. It is crucial to break it down into separate sentences for clarity. Additionally, the sentence contains multiple errors in phrasing and grammar. The corrections aim to provide clear and concise statements regarding the suggested actions and attitudes to reduce crime.

Improved

Improved version:

Law enforcement personnel should receive comprehensive training and demonstrate courage in executing their duties. Empowering them to enforce strict measures against criminals fosters a climate of deterrence. Moreover, fostering a positive mindset, refraining from provocation, and promoting respectful communication contribute significantly to the reduction of criminal incidents.

Source: Mr Aniket Mehla 07-07-23  MT 05

Original Text!

        There is a little room for doubt that what are the main causes of the rising crime. There are many things which results in the happening of crime and many ways to prevent them.                    

         There are many reasons for increasing crime. One of the main reason is unemployment and poverty. As people do not have jobs. Even if they are educated, they don’t get jobs according to their qualifications, which leads in that people are forced to do robberies and theft, very poor people who do not have anything to even eat and don’t have shelters because their unemployed and this forced them to do something wrong to live in to survive. Another main reasons of crime is that people have anger issues and they don’t like if anyone do wrong they tease them which can result in a great fight or crime.  

        To handle and to decrease the crime. There are many ways that providing employment to the poor or the needy or to provide subsidies which helps them to even survive which can leads in reducing crime. Police should be well trained and brave and to give them orders to work hard and take very strict actions against the crime so that criminals should have fear in their minds before doing the crime and we have to be every time we fresh mind and not to tease or abuse anyone in anger always be positive note to give anyone hate speech and be friendly with everyone which definitely helps in reducing the crime.

Corrected!

       There is little room for doubt about the main causes of rising crime. Many factors contribute to the occurrence of crime, and there are various ways to prevent it.

        There are many reasons for the increase in crime. One of the main reasons is unemployment and poverty. People do not have jobs, and even if they are educated, they struggle to find jobs that match their qualifications. This leads to individuals being forced to resort to robberies and theft. Very poor people, who lack basic necessities and shelters due to unemployment, are compelled to engage in illegal activities in order to survive.

         Another major reason for crime is people having anger issues. They tend to react negatively if someone wrongs them, often resorting to teasing, which can result in fights or criminal behavior.

         To effectively handle and reduce crime, there are several approaches. Providing employment opportunities and offering subsidies to the poor or those in need can help them survive, ultimately leading to a reduction in crime rates. It is crucial for the police to be well-trained and courageous. They should receive orders to work diligently and take strict actions against criminals, instilling fear in their minds before committing crimes. Additionally, it is essential to maintain a fresh mindset and avoid teasing or abusing anyone in anger. Instead, it is important to promote positive interactions, refrain from hate speech, and foster a friendly atmosphere, all of which significantly contribute to the reduction of crime.

IMPROVED VERSION

  There is little room for doubt regarding the primary factors contributing to the surge in criminal activities. Various factors play a crucial role in the prevalence of crime, necessitating comprehensive strategies to address and prevent this issue effectively.

 Unemployment and poverty stand out as significant driving forces behind the increase in crime rates. Despite their education, individuals often encounter challenges securing jobs that match their qualifications due to the prevailing unemployment. Consequently, individuals, especially those living in abject poverty without access to essential resources and shelter, are driven to engage in criminal activities such as theft and robbery for mere survival.

 In addition to socio-economic factors, widespread anger management issues contribute to criminal behavior. Intolerance of wrongdoing often leads individuals to resort to teasing others, which can escalate into severe altercations or criminal acts. To effectively mitigate crime rates, it is crucial to provide comprehensive solutions.

 Implementing diverse strategies is imperative for effectively addressing and reducing crime. Providing employment opportunities and offering subsidies to support vulnerable populations significantly contribute to the decline in crime rates. By facilitating job placements that match individuals' qualifications and providing financial assistance, we can alleviate the financial burdens that often push individuals towards criminal activities.

 In conclusion, the surge in crime rates necessitates a multifaceted approach to tackling this issue. Combating unemployment and poverty, addressing anger management issues, and implementing strategies such as employment opportunities and subsidies are essential in reducing crime rates. It is imperative that law enforcement personnel receive rigorous training and are empowered to enforce strict measures against criminals. Additionally, fostering a positive mindset, refraining from provocation, and promoting respectful communication are key aspects in creating a safer society with reduced crime rates.

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