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Task-2

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Ms Shraddha 20-07-23  MT 04

Original Text

Majority of people do illegally hunting of wild animals across the world, and this may effect the environment. 

Corrected

Corrected version:


The majority of people engage in illegal hunting of wild animals across the world, and this may affect the environment.

Explanation: 

"Majority" should be preceded by the article "the" to indicate a specific group of people. "Effect" should be changed to "affect" as it is a verb indicating a change or influence on the environment.

Improved

Improved version:

The illegal hunting of wild animals is a widespread practice worldwide, causing significant harm to the environment and ecosystems.

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Original Text

Nowadays, developing countries do poaching, illegally hunting of natural habitat. This may harm the environment.

Corrected

Corrected version:


Nowadays, developing countries engage in poaching, which involves the illegal hunting of natural habitats. This may cause harm to the environment.

Explanation: 

"Do poaching" should be changed to "engage in poaching" to indicate the action of participating in the activity. "Illegally hunting" should be changed to "the illegal hunting" to clarify that it is the act of hunting that is illegal, not the habitat itself. The verb "harm" should be followed by the preposition "to" to indicate the recipient of the harm.

Improved

Improved version:

Developing countries are increasingly participating in poaching activities, which involve the unlawful hunting of animals in their natural habitats, further exacerbating the negative impact on the environment.

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Original Text

A significant number of people do hunting for sell them in the market at a high price. Kill camels, tigers to make different kinds of product like shoes, purse etc. They kill animals for food also to stay healthy and this may cause many severe problems like disturbance in food chain.

Corrected

Corrected version:

A significant number of people engage in hunting to sell animals in the market at a high price. They kill camels and tigers to make various products such as shoes and purses. They kill animals for food and to maintain their health, but this may cause severe problems such as disruptions in the food chain.

Explanation: 

 "Do hunting" should be changed to "engage in hunting" to indicate the action of participating in the activity. "For sell them" should be changed to "to sell animals" to clarify the purpose of the hunting. "Kill" should be changed to "they kill" to specify the subject of the sentence. "Different kinds of product" should be changed to "various products" to indicate a range or variety of items. "Also" should be changed to "and" to indicate the conjunction between two purposes. "Like disturbance in food chain" should be changed to "such as disruptions in the food chain" to provide specific examples of the severe problems.

Improved

Improved version:

The illegal wildlife trade is driven by the demand for high-priced animal products, such as shoes and purses made from the skins of camels and tigers, leading to the depletion of these species and disrupting the delicate balance of the food chain.

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Original Text

Nowadays, a large number of people are watching films or movies. In movies, actors kill many species and to see that a great many people also try to kill animals. Movies shows many illegally hunting of wild animals to attract people also children may attract to these movies and they also kill animals. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Nowadays, a large number of people watch films or movies. In movies, actors kill many species, and as a result, a great many people also try to kill animals. Movies show many instances of illegal hunting of wild animals to attract people, including children who may be attracted to these movies and subsequently engage in animal killing.


Explanation: 


"Are watching" should be changed to "watch" to indicate a general present tense action. "And to see that" should be added to indicate the cause-and-effect relationship between actors killing species in movies and people trying to kill animals. "Movies shows" should be changed to "Movies show" to indicate the correct subject-verb agreement. "Also" should be changed to "including" to indicate that children are part of the group of people being attracted to the movies. "They also kill animals" should be changed to "and subsequently engage in animal killing" to clarify the cause-and-effect relationship.

Improved

Improved version:

The depiction of illegal hunting in movies and films can attract a large audience, including children, who may be influenced to engage in animal killing activities, perpetuating the harmful cycle.

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Original Text

A significant number of people are not aware of these things. This may effect on food chain. If they kill species it may disturbance in food chain and make difficulties in food chain as well as human society. Killing animals for food may effect on environment and natural habitat. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

A significant number of people are not aware of these issues. This may have an effect on the food chain. If they kill species, it may cause disturbances in the food chain and create difficulties for both the food chain and human society. Killing animals for food may have an effect on the environment and natural habitat.

Explanation: 


"These things" should be changed to "these issues" to provide a more specific and clear reference to the lack of awareness. "Effect on" should be changed to "have an effect on" to indicate the impact or influence on the food chain. "It may disturbance" should be changed to "it may cause disturbances" to indicate the result or consequence of killing species. "Make difficulties" should be changed to "create difficulties" to provide a clearer and more accurate description of the impact on the food chain and human society. "Effect on" should be changed to "have an effect on" to indicate the impact or influence on the environment and natural habitat.

Improved

Improved version:

Lack of awareness about the consequences of illegal hunting and its effects on the environment and food chain can result in severe disruptions to both ecosystems and human society.

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Original Text

For instance, if hunting only a hen this may effect on food chain and a large number of species are become extinct. This may effect an detrimental problems for human society. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

For instance, if hunting only hens, this may have an effect on the food chain, and a large number of species may become extinct. This may have detrimental effects on human society. 


Explanation: 


"If hunting only a hen" should be changed to "if hunting only hens" to indicate the plural form of the animal being hunted. "May effect" should be changed to "may have an effect" to indicate the potential impact or influence. "Are become extinct" should be changed to "may become extinct" to indicate the possibility of species becoming extinct. "Effect an detrimental problems" should be changed to "have detrimental effects" to indicate the negative consequences or impacts on human society.

Improved

Improved version:

The hunting of animals for food can have detrimental effects on the environment and natural habitats, especially if specific species like hens are targeted, potentially leading to their extinction and causing further imbalances in the food chain.

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Original Text

Furthermore, a great many tourist attraction were not coming on that country. People go different countries to see natural habitat.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Furthermore, a great many tourist attractions may not be present in that country. People travel to different countries to see natural habitats. 


Explanation: 


"Were not coming" should be changed to "may not be present" to indicate the potential absence of tourist attractions in the country. "Go different countries" should be changed to "travel to different countries" to indicate the action of visiting or exploring other countries.

Improved

Improved version:

The loss of wildlife due to illegal hunting can also impact the tourism industry, as natural habitats are often a key attraction for travelers seeking to experience and appreciate the beauty of different countries.

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Original Text

To conclusion, it can be seen that hunting wild animals may harm species as well as human society.

Corrected

Corrected version:

In conclusion, it can be seen that hunting wild animals may harm both species and human society. 


Explanation: 


"To conclusion" should be changed to "In conclusion" to indicate the final statement or summary. "As well as" should be changed to "both" to provide a clearer and more concise description of the harm caused to both species and human society.

Improved

Improved version:

In summary, illegal hunting of wild animals poses significant threats to both species and human society, with far-reaching consequences for the environment, food chain, and tourism industry.

Source: Ms Shraddha 20-07-23  MT 04

Original Text!

   In many ways, the world would not be the same without the natural habitat. Majority of people do illegally hunting of wild animals across the world, and this may effect the environment. 

Nowad, developing countries do poaching, illegally hunting of natural habitat. This may harm the environment. A significant number of people do hunting for sell them in the market at a high price. Kill camels, tigers to make different kinds of product like shoes, purse etc. They kill animals for food also to stay healthy and this may cause many severe problems like disturbance in food chain. Nowadays, a large number of people are watching films or movies. In movies, actors kill many species and to see that a great many people also try to kill animals. Movies shows many illegally hunting of wild animals to attract people also children may attract to these movies and they also kill animals. 

A significant number of people are not aware of these things. This may effect on food chain. If they kill species it may disturbance in food chain and make difficulties in food chain as well as human society. Killing animals for food may effect on environment and natural habitat. For instance, if hunting only a hen this may effect on food chain and a large number of species are become extinct. This may effect an detrimental problems for human society. Furthermore, a great many tourist attraction were not coming on that country. People go different countries to see natural habitat. 

To conclusion, it can be seen that hunting wild animals may harm species as well as human society.

Corrected!

    In many ways, the world would not be the same without natural habitats. The majority of people engage in illegal hunting of wild animals across the world, and this may affect the environment. 

Nowadays, developing countries engage in poaching and illegal hunting of natural habitats, which can harm the environment. A significant number of people hunt to sell animals in the market at high prices. They kill camels and tigers to make different kinds of products like shoes and purses. Animals are also killed for food, which can cause severe problems like disturbances in the food chain. Nowadays, a large number of people watch films or movies. In these movies, actors kill many species, and to see that, many people also try to kill animals. Movies show many instances of illegal hunting of wild animals to attract people, and children may be attracted to these movies and also kill animals. 

A significant number of people are not aware of these things, which can have an effect on the food chain. If they kill species, it may cause disturbances in the food chain and create difficulties for both the food chain and human society. Killing animals for food can also have an effect on the environment and natural habitats. For instance, if only a hen is hunted, it can have an effect on the food chain, and a large number of species may become extinct. This can lead to detrimental problems for human society. Furthermore, many tourist attractions may be affected, as people often visit different countries to see natural habitats. 

In conclusion, it can be seen that hunting wild animals may harm both species and human society.

IMPROVED VERSION

   The illegal hunting of wild animals is a widespread practice that can have a detrimental impact on the environment. This is particularly prevalent in developing countries, where individuals engage in poaching, which involves the illegal hunting of animals in their natural habitats. As a result, the delicate balance of ecosystems is disrupted, leading to negative consequences for both the environment and human society.

It is concerning that a significant number of people participate in hunting solely for the purpose of selling animals in the market at high prices. This not only contributes to the decline of animal populations but also perpetuates the demand for illegal wildlife products. For instance, camels and tigers are killed for their body parts, which are then used to make various luxury items such as shoes and purses. This exploitation of wildlife for commercial gain is not only unethical but also contributes to the endangerment of these species.

Furthermore, the killing of animals for food and health reasons can have severe consequences. While it is understandable that individuals may rely on hunting for sustenance, it is important to recognize that this practice can disrupt the delicate balance of the food chain. When certain species are overhunted, it can lead to disruptions in the ecosystem, affecting not only the survival of other animal species but also the availability of resources for human populations. This can have far-reaching effects on the stability and sustainability of the environment and human societies.

The impact of hunting is not limited to the environment; it also extends to the cultural and economic aspects of societies. The prevalence of hunting in movies, for example, can influence viewers, including children, to romanticize or idolize the act of killing animals. This can lead to a desensitization towards the ethical implications of hunting and result in an increased likelihood of individuals engaging in animal killing. The consequences of this extend beyond the individual act itself, as it perpetuates a cycle of harm to wildlife populations and disrupts the delicate balance of ecosystems.

These issues are compounded by a lack of awareness among a significant number of people. Many individuals remain uninformed about the negative consequences of hunting on both the environment and human society. This lack of awareness can perpetuate destructive practices and hinder efforts towards conservation and sustainable resource management.

In conclusion, the hunting of wild animals, particularly in an illegal and unsustainable manner, poses significant threats to the environment and human society. It is crucial for governments, organizations, and individuals to work together to address this issue through stricter regulations, awareness campaigns, and sustainable alternatives for livelihoods. Only by recognizing the importance of preserving wildlife and their habitats can we ensure the long-term well-being of our planet and future generations.

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