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Task-1
Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes
Common Errors
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Source: Mr Parnoor Singh 30-06-23
Original Text
The bar graph shows the production and consumption of electricity of the top 10 countries in 2014.
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Improved version:
The bar graph illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in the top 10 countries in 2014.
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Original Text
As usual China always on the top in every situation.
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Corrected version:
As usual, China is always on top in every situation.
Explanation:
The correction adds the verb "is" after "China" and changes "always on the top" to "is always on top" to create a grammatically correct sentence.
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Improved version:
As consistently observed, China consistently maintains its leading position in every scenario.
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Original Text
As we can see that china’s consumption is near about equal to its production.
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Corrected version:
As we can see, China's consumption is nearly equal to its production.
Explanation:
The correction changes "near about" to "nearly" for more precise language and clarifies that China's consumption is equal to its production.
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Improved version:
Notably, China's consumption closely aligns with its production, indicating a nearly equal balance. This can be attributed to China's substantial population compared to other nations.
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Original Text
China’s production and consumption is more than others because China has the largest population as compare to the other countries and the United States comes on the second in the production and consumption of electricity.
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Corrected version:
China's production and consumption are higher than that of other countries because China has the largest population. The United States ranks second in the production and consumption of electricity.
Explanation:
The correction changes "is" to "are" to match the plural subject "production and consumption." Additionally, it restructures the sentence to clearly state that China's higher production and consumption are due to its larger population, while the United States ranks second in electricity production and consumption.
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Improved version:
China surpasses other countries in both production and consumption due to its vast population. In terms of electricity production and consumption, the United States follows closely in second place.
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China and United state are on the top because China and United States are growing day by day their production and consumption automatically increase.
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Corrected version:
China and the United States are at the top because they are experiencing continuous growth, leading to an increase in their production and consumption.
Explanation:
The correction adds the verb "are" after "China and the United States" to make the sentence grammatically correct. It also clarifies that the growth in production and consumption leads to an automatic increase.
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Improved version:
The prominent positions of China and the United States can be attributed to their continuous growth, resulting in an automatic rise in production and consumption.
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Original Text
Russia, Japan, India and other countries do not produce the half of the China and USA because these countries are not that much grown and not have good technology as China and United States have.
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Corrected version:
Russia, Japan, India, and other countries do not produce half as much as China and the USA because these countries are not as developed and do not have the same level of technology as China and the United States.
Explanation:
The correction changes "that much grown" to "as developed" to convey the intended meaning. Additionally, it adds "do not" before "have good technology" to form a negative sentence.
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In contrast, countries such as Russia, Japan, and India, along with other nations, produce less than half of what China and the United States generate. This discrepancy can be attributed to their comparatively slower growth and less advanced technological capabilities.
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Original Text
As we can see that every country produces more electricity but in these 10 countries, Germany is the only one which consumes more electricity than its Production.
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Corrected version:
As we can see, every country produces more electricity. However, among these 10 countries, Germany is the only one that consumes more electricity than it produces.
Explanation:
The correction adds "we can see" at the beginning of the sentence to maintain consistency with the previous sentences. It also restructures the sentence to clarify that Germany is the only country among the top 10 that consumes more electricity than it produces.
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Improved version:
Notably, the bar graph demonstrates that while all countries exhibit increased electricity production, among these ten nations, Germany stands out as the only country consuming more electricity than it produces.
Source: Mr Parnoor Singh 30-06-23
Original Text!
The bar graph shows the production and consumption of electricity of the top 10 countries in 2014. As usual China always on the top in every situation. As we can see that china’s consumption is near about equal to its production. China’s production and consumption is more than others because China has the largest population as compare to the other countries and the United States comes on the second in the production and consumption of electricity. China and United state are on the top because China and United States are growing day by day their production and consumption automatically increase. Russia, Japan, India and other countries do not produce the half of the China and USA because these countries are not that much grown and not have good technology as China and United States have. As we can see that every country produces more electricity but in these 10 countries, Germany is the only one which consume more electricity than its Production.
Corrected!
The provided bar graph illustrates the production and consumption of electricity among the top 10 countries in the year 2014.
China consistently holds the top position, as is often the case in various scenarios. It can be observed that China's electricity consumption is approximately equal to its production. This can be attributed to China's large population, which surpasses that of other countries. As a result, China surpasses other nations both in terms of electricity production and consumption. The United States ranks second in terms of electricity production and consumption.
China and the United States occupy the top spots due to their continuous growth, resulting in automatic increases in their production and consumption levels. On the other hand, countries such as Russia, Japan, India, and others do not produce even half of what China and the USA generate. This disparity can be attributed to the comparatively slower growth and less advanced technology in these countries, in contrast to China and the United States.
It is worth noting that every country depicted in the graph exhibits an overall increase in electricity production. However, among the 10 countries shown, Germany stands out as the only one that consumes more electricity than it produces.
Overall, the bar graph provides insights into the production and consumption patterns of electricity in the top 10 countries in 2014. China and the United States maintain their dominant positions due to their robust growth, while Germany deviates from the norm by consuming more electricity than it produces.
IMPROVED VERSION
The provided bar graph depicts the production and consumption of electricity in the top 10 countries during the year 2014. Notably, China emerges as the consistent frontrunner, maintaining its leading position in various scenarios.
China's electricity consumption closely aligns with its production, showcasing a remarkable equilibrium. This trend can be attributed to China's significant population, which surpasses that of other nations. Consequently, China outperforms other countries in both electricity production and consumption. The United States follows closely behind, securing the second position in terms of production and consumption.
The top positions of China and the United States can be attributed to their relentless growth, leading to an automatic surge in their production and consumption levels. On the other hand, countries such as Russia, Japan, and India, along with several others, fall short, producing less than half of what China and the United States generate. This discrepancy can be attributed to their comparatively slower growth rates and less advanced technological capabilities.
Upon examining the bar graph, it is evident that each country has witnessed an overall increase in electricity production. However, among these ten nations, Germany stands out as the sole country consuming more electricity than it produces.
In conclusion, the bar graph provides valuable insights into the production and consumption patterns of electricity among the top 10 countries in 2014. China and the United States maintain dominant positions due to their remarkable growth rates, while Germany stands out as a unique case with higher electricity consumption than production.
Corrected
Corrected version:
The bar graph shows the production and consumption of electricity in the top 10 countries in 2014.
Explanation:
The correction changes "of" to "in" to indicate that the bar graph represents the production and consumption of electricity in the top 10 countries.