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Task-1

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Mr Aniket Mehla 07-07-23 MT 05

Original Text

The given chart and the graph board shows the number of performers entering the Olympics. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The given chart and the graph board show the number of performers entering the Olympics. 

Explanation:  

The subject "chart and graph board" is plural, so the verb should be "show" instead of "shows."

Improved

Improved version:

The given chart and the graph board show the number of performers participating in the Olympics. 

2

Original Text

Firstly, the chart shows about number of males and females participating in different years. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Firstly, the chart shows the number of males and females participating in different years. 

Explanation: 

The word "about" is unnecessary in this context. 

Improved

Improved version:

Firstly, the chart displays the number of males and females participating in different years. 

3

Original Text

In 1924 men have all the control on the Olympics as there are 3000 males and almost nil women about 50 to 70. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In 1924, men had all the control in the Olympics as there were 3000 males and almost no women, around 50 to 70. 

Explanation: 

The verb tense should be past tense to match the context of 1924. "Nil" should be replaced with "no" for clarity. The phrase "about 50 to 70" should be rephrased to "around 50 to 70." 

Improved

Improved version:

In 1924, men had complete control over the Olympics, with 3000 males and almost no women, approximately 50 to 70. 

4

Original Text

Then in 1952 the number increases to 4500 of males but a very slight rise of females at 500. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Then in 1952, the number of males increased to 4500, but there was a very slight rise in females to 500.

Explanation: 

The verb tense should be past tense to match the context of 1952. The phrase "4500 of males" should be rephrased as "the number of males increased to 4500."

Improved

Improved version:

Then, in 1952, the number of males increased to 4500, while the number of females saw a slight rise to 500. 

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Original Text

Same continues to be in 1984 as men performers rise to nearly 5100 and women to 2500. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The same continues in 1984 as the number of male performers rises to nearly 5100 and the number of female performers rises to 2500. 

Explanation: 

The phrase "Same continues to be" should be rephrased as "The same continues." The noun phrase "men performers" should be changed to "number of male performers" for clarity and consistency. 

Improved

Improved version:

The same trend continued in 1984, with the number of male performers rising to nearly 5100 and the number of female performers reaching 2500. 

6

Original Text

At last in 2012, men get a constant rise as like previous years but women players get a rise at peak with nearly 5000 players and with almost 6000 men players. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Finally, in 2012, men experience a constant rise as in previous years, while women players reach a peak with nearly 5000 players and there are almost 6000 male players. 

Explanation: 

"At last" should be changed to "Finally" for a smoother transition. "Get a constant rise" should be rephrased as "experience a constant rise." The phrase "as like previous years" should be changed to "as in previous years." The phrase "women players get a rise at peak" should be rephrased as "women players reach a peak." The phrase "with nearly 5000 players and with almost 6000 men players" should be rephrased as "with nearly 5000 players and almost 6000 male players" for clarity and conciseness. 

Improved

Improved version:

Finally, in 2012, there was a constant rise in male participation, similar to previous years, whereas female players peaked at nearly 5000, with male players reaching almost 6000. 

7

Original Text

The graph clearly shows that participants increases slowly till 1984 but afterwards Olympic’s achieve is a great number of players and get a high-rise of performers till 2012 and its popularity goes to peak. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

The graph clearly shows that the number of participants increases slowly until 1984, but afterwards, the Olympics achieve a great number of players and experience a high-rise of performers until 2012, reaching its peak popularity. 

Explanation: 

The verb "increases" should be changed to "increase" to match the subject "participants." "Olympic's achieve" should be rephrased as "the Olympics achieve." "Get a high-rise" should be rephrased as "experience a high-rise." The phrase "till 2012 and its popularity goes to peak" should be rephrased as "until 2012, reaching its peak popularity" for clarity and smoother expression.

Improved

Improved version:

The graph clearly illustrates a gradual increase in participants until 1984. Subsequently, the Olympics witnessed a substantial growth in the number of players, with a significant rise in performers until 2012, ultimately reaching its pinnacle of popularity.

Source: Mr Aniket Mehla 07-07-23 MT 05

Original Text!

The given chart and the graph board shows the number of performers entering the Olympics. Firstly, the chart shows about number of males and females participating in different years. In 1924 men have all the control on the Olympics as there are 3000 males and almost nil women about 50 to 70. Then in 1952 the number increases to 4500 of males but a very slight rise of females at 500. Same continues to be in 1984 as men performers rise to nearly 5100 and women to 2500. At last in 2012, men get a constant rise as like previous years but women players get a rise at peak with nearly 5000 players and with almost 6000 men players. The graph clearly shows that participants increases slowly till 1984 but afterwards Olympic’s achieve is a great number of players and get a high-rise of performers till 2012 and its popularity goes to peak.

Corrected!

The given chart and the graph board show the number of performers entering the Olympics. Firstly, the chart displays the number of males and females participating in different years. In 1924, men had all the control in the Olympics, with 3000 males and almost no women, about 50 to 70. Then, in 1952, the number of males increased to 4500, but there was only a very slight rise in the number of females, with 500. The same trend continued in 1984, with male performers rising to nearly 5100 and female performers reaching 2500. Lastly, in 2012, there was a constant rise in the number of male participants, similar to previous years, while female players experienced a peak rise with nearly 5000 players and almost 6000 male players. The graph clearly shows that participant numbers increased slowly until 1984, but afterwards, the Olympics achieved a significant number of players and experienced a high rise in performers until 2012, reaching its peak popularity.

IMPROVED VERSION

The given chart and graph board depict the participation trends of athletes in the Olympics. Primarily, the chart presents the number of male and female participants across different years.

In 1924, the Olympic Games were predominantly dominated by men, with 3000 male athletes and an almost negligible representation of women, ranging from approximately 50 to 70. This gender disparity was prevalent during that era.

Moving to 1952, there was a notable increase in the number of male participants, reaching 4500, while the rise in female participation was comparatively modest, with around 500 women athletes taking part.

The pattern continued into 1984, witnessing a substantial rise in male athletes, totaling nearly 5100, whereas female participation experienced a significant boost, reaching 2500. This signified progress towards gender equality in the Olympics.

Finally, in 2012, male participation continued to rise consistently, consistent with previous years. However, it was the female athletes who reached a peak, with nearly 5000 participants, compared to almost 6000 male athletes. This surge in female representation exemplifies the growing prominence and popularity of women's participation in the Olympics.

The accompanying graph clearly illustrates a gradual increase in participants until 1984. Following that, the Olympics witnessed a remarkable surge in the number of participants, leading to a substantial rise in athletes until 2012, ultimately culminating in the pinnacle of its popularity.

In conclusion, the chart and graph data highlight the evolving dynamics of gender representation in the Olympics. Over the years, there has been a significant increase in the number of female athletes, signaling progress towards gender equality in sports. This growth in participation has contributed to the Olympics' enduring popularity and its status as a global sporting event.

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