Corrected version:

The 21st century has witnessed an unprecedented number of individuals engaging in crime due to their needs.

Explanation:

The original sentence had multiple errors. "engage them into crime" should be "engaging in crime," and "due to seek to their needs" should be "due to their needs."

Improved version:

The 21st century has witnessed an unprecedented increase in the number of individuals engaging in criminal activities due to their pressing economic needs.

Corrected version:

Therefore, numerous lawbreakers committing crimes again after a period of imprisonment.  This essay endeavours to explore the intricate tapestry of the causes underlying the aforementioned assertion, as well as certain ramifications that would have on society.

Explanation: 

"committing crime" should be "commit crimes," and the sentence lacked proper subject-verb agreement. The original sentence had issues with word order and verb tense. "ramifications would be have" should be "ramifications that would have."

Improved version:

Consequently, many lawbreakers return to a life of crime after serving a prison sentence, which calls for an examination of the underlying causes and potential societal consequences, as explored in this essay.

Corrected version:

Elizabeth, once confessed, "punishment is not for revenge, but to lessen crime and reform the criminal." 

Explanation: 

"listen crime" should be "lessen crime." The original sentence had a verb that didn't fit the context.

Improved version:

Elizabeth, a British writer, once stated, "Punishment is not for revenge, but for reducing crime and rehabilitating the offender." 

Corrected version:

However, criminals are still committing crimes further after being released from prison. 

Explanation: 

 "committing crime" should be "committing crimes," and "released from prison" should be "being released from prison."

Improved version:

Nevertheless, some criminals persist in illegal activities even after their release from prison.

Corrected version:

Various factors play a crucial role in the prevalence of crime. One notable factor is that unemployment and poverty stand out as significant notions. 

Explanation: 

The word "There" was unnecessary in this sentence. The original sentence lacked the word "that" to connect the two clauses properly.

Improved version:

Various factors play a crucial role in the prevalence of crime. One notable factor contributing to crime is the presence of unemployment and poverty, both of which significantly impact society.

Corrected version:

In addition, individuals, especially those living in poverty without essential resources such as shelter and food, engage in infringements of the law via wrongful activities like theft and robbery for survival. 

Explanation: 

The original sentence had several errors in phrasing and word order.

Improved version:

In addition, individuals living in poverty, who lack essential resources such as shelter and food, frequently turn to criminal activities like theft and robbery for survival.

Corrected version:

Although offenders released from prison, most employers refuse to give them a job, and culprits do not have any other option to earn money. So, it is easier for them to earn money if they reunite with an old criminal group and get involved in unlawful acts. 

Explanation: 

The original sentence had multiple grammatical and punctuation errors.

Improved version:

Although some offenders struggle to find employment upon release from prison, resorting to rejoining criminal networks, it is essential to provide them with opportunities for legal and gainful employment.

Corrected version:

"Large or small, crime affects everyone." 

Explanation: 

The original sentence was mostly correct, but "all" should be replaced with "everyone" for better clarity.

Improved version:

"Large or small, crime affects everyone." 

Corrected version:

The predominant detrimental effect of this is that other individuals and the upcoming generation will be influenced by criminals to commit crimes. 

Explanation: 

"upcoming generation" should have the article "the" before it, and "crime" should be plural to match "crimes."

Improved version:

The predominant detrimental effect of this situation is that it influences other individuals and the younger generation to engage in criminal activities.

Corrected version:

Secondly, the legal factor will also be affected. 

Explanation: 

The original sentence was incomplete and lacked proper phrasing. 

Improved version:

Secondly, legal institutions and systems can also be adversely affected.

Corrected version:

To be more specific, other people also start breaking laws and do not follow the rules and regulations implemented by the government. 

Explanation: 

The original sentence had a tense mismatch and phrasing issues. 

Improved version:

To be more specific, individuals may begin to disregard laws and regulations implemented by the government, undermining the rule of law.

Corrected version:

Therefore, the authorities should provide education to prisoners during their time in jail. 

Explanation: 

The original sentence had a minor grammatical error and phrasing issues.

Improved version:

Therefore, it is imperative for authorities to provide education and rehabilitation programs for prisoners during their incarceration.

Corrected version:

To conclude, according to the aforementioned argument, it can be clearly inferred that unemployment and poverty among people are the predominant reasons for committing further crimes as soon as offenders are released from jail. 

Explanation: 

The original sentence had subject-verb agreement errors and phrasing issues.

Improved version:

In conclusion, based on the aforementioned arguments, it is evident that unemployment and poverty are primary factors driving individuals to commit further crimes upon their release from prison. Addressing these issues is essential for reducing recidivism and promoting a safer society.