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Task-2

Let's Learn from Others' Mistakes

Common Errors 

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Source: Ms Shraddha 22-08-23 MT 17

Original Text

The 21st century has witnessed a significant increase in pollution and traffic problems in modern nations worldwide, but in order to prevent traffic problems government impose tax on private cars.

Corrected

Corrected version:


The 21st century has witnessed a significant increase in pollution and traffic problems in modern nations worldwide, but in order to prevent traffic problems, the government imposes tax on private cars.


Explanation: 

Added the missing comma after "traffic problems" and corrected the verb form to "imposes" to match the subject "government." Also, added "the" before "government" for proper article usage.

Improved

Improved version:

The 21st century has witnessed a pronounced surge in environmental contamination and traffic challenges across contemporary nations globally. As a countermeasure, governmental bodies have instituted levies on privately owned vehicles. 

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Original Text

This essay will shed some lights on the upsides and downsides behind this statement.

Corrected

Corrected version:

This essay will shed some light on the upsides and downsides behind this statement.

Explanation: 

"Lights" should be corrected to "light" as "shed light" is the correct expression.

Improved

Improved version:

This essay aims to elucidate both the positive and negative aspects associated with this assertion.

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Original Text

Overall, a growing number of massed indulged in shaping their lives and fulfilling their matrialistic need by using of their own private vehicles.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Overall, a growing number of masses indulge in shaping their lives and fulfilling their materialistic needs by using their own private vehicles.

Explanation: 

Corrected the verb form from "massed" to "masses" and "indulged" to "indulge." Also, removed the extra "of" and corrected "matrialistic" to "materialistic" and "need" to "needs."

Improved

Improved version:

On the whole, an increasing number of individuals are actively engaged in shaping their lives and fulfilling their material aspirations by means of their personal automobiles.

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Original Text

However, the problem may be mitigated by the implementation of a new restrictions.

Corrected

Corrected version:

However, the problem may be mitigated by the implementation of new restrictions.

Explanation: 

Removed the unnecessary "a" before "new restrictions" to maintain correct noun count.

Improved

Improved version:

Nonetheless, this dilemma can be mitigated through the implementation of novel regulatory frameworks.

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Original Text

In the present era, if governments impose tax on private cars and use individuals money to improve in public transport. There are many advantages of this. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In the present era, if governments impose tax on private cars and use individuals' money to improve public transport. There are many advantages to this. 

Explanation: 

Added the possessive form "individuals'" before "money" and corrected "improve in public transport" to "improve public transport." Added "to" after "advantages" for correct preposition usage.

Improved

Improved version:

In today's context, if governments were to enforce taxation on privately owned vehicles and allocate citizens' funds towards enhancing public transportation infrastructure, several advantageous outcomes might ensue. Numerous advantages are inherently tied to this proposal. 

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Original Text

One notable impact is pollution may be reduced by these rules and regulations.

Corrected

Corrected version:

One notable impact is that pollution may be reduced by these rules and regulations.

Explanation: 

Added the conjunction "that" to improve the sentence structure and make it clearer.

Improved

Improved version:

Particularly noteworthy is the potential reduction in pollution through the implementation of stringent rules and regulations. 

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Original Text

In this way environment will save and a significant number of people may not suffer from these problems. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In this way, the environment will be saved, and a significant number of people may not suffer from these problems.

Explanation: 

Added commas for better sentence structure. Changed "environment will save" to "the environment will be saved" for proper verb tense and article usage.

Improved

Improved version:

This, in turn, would not only preserve the environment but also alleviate the challenges faced by a multitude of individuals.

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Original Text

Pollution has a detrimental effect on the folks.

Corrected

Corrected version:

Pollution has a detrimental effect on people.

Explanation: 

Replaced "folks" with "people" for more formal and appropriate language.

Improved

Improved version:

The impact of pollution extends adversely to communities. 

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Original Text

Imposing strict rules can be reduce traffic problems. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Imposing strict rules can reduce traffic problems. 

Explanation: 

Removed the auxiliary verb "be" to form the correct verb tense. 

Improved

Improved version:

The imposition of stringent regulations could effectively alleviate traffic congestion.

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Original Text

Traffic congestion have become indisputable problems in contemporary society. Moreover, accidents may be reduces. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Traffic congestion has become an indisputable problem in contemporary society. Moreover, accidents may be reduced. 

Explanation: 

Corrected the verb form from "have become" to "has become" to match the singular subject "Traffic congestion." Added "an" before "indisputable problem" for proper article usage. Corrected the verb form from "reduces" to "reduced" to match the subject "accidents." 

Improved

Improved version:

The issue of traffic congestion has incontrovertibly manifested itself in the modern societal landscape. Furthermore, a decrease in the incidence of accidents could potentially be witnessed.

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Original Text

A great many people now travel by only railways and in this way, governments can earn more benefits.

Corrected

Corrected version:

A great many people now travel only by railways, and in this way, governments can earn more benefits.

Explanation: 

Added a comma after "railways" for better sentence structure.

Improved

Improved version:

An increasing proportion of the populace now exclusively relies on railways for their travel needs, thereby offering governments an avenue to enhance their fiscal revenues.

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Original Text

Turning to its drawbacks, if governments imposed heavily tax on individuals, for instance, it stands out as their rights are taken. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

Turning to its drawbacks, if governments imposed heavy taxes on individuals, for instance, it stands out as their rights are taken. 

Explanation: 

Corrected "heavily tax" to "heavy taxes" for proper noun-adjective agreement.

Improved

Improved version:

Conversely, examining the potential drawbacks, substantial government taxation on individuals might inadvertently impinge upon their rights.

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Original Text

People may not travel by their own cars. 

Corrected

The original sentence is correct. 

Improved

Improved version:

Consequently, individuals might opt against utilising their personal vehicles.

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Original Text

In addition to, the prevalence of traffic congestion is attributed to people.

Corrected

Corrected version:

In addition, the prevalence of traffic congestion is attributed to people.

Explanation: 

Removed the extra "to" after "In addition" for better sentence flow.

Improved

Improved version:

Additionally, the prominence of traffic congestion is predominantly attributed to human behaviour.

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Original Text

In today's face-paced world, individuals loss their job and they become jobless because they rely on technology as it rapidly changing and people only have these kinds of jobs such as car repairing. Employment rate may increase. 

Corrected

Corrected version:

In today's fast-paced world, individuals lose their jobs and become jobless because they rely on technology as it is rapidly changing, and people only have these kinds of jobs, such as car repairing. The employment rate may increase. 

Explanation: 

Corrected "face-paced" to "fast-paced," "loss" to "lose," "job" to "jobs," and added the auxiliary verb "is" after "it" for proper tense. Also, added a comma after "changing" and corrected the punctuation around "such as car repairing" for clarity. Added the definite article "The" before "employment rate" for proper article usage.

Improved

Improved version:

In the contemporary fast-paced milieu, individuals are at the risk of unemployment as they tether their livelihoods to rapidly evolving technology. Their occupational choices are constricted primarily to professions like automobile repair. The prospect of an elevated employment rate becomes distinctly discernible. 

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Original Text

In conclusion, it is evident that governments should increase tax on cars in this way people may not suffer from any problems.

Corrected

Corrected version:

In conclusion, it is evident that governments should increase taxes on cars; in this way, people may not suffer from any problems.

Explanation: 

Changed "tax" to "taxes" for correct plural form. Added a semicolon after "cars" and a comma after "way" for better punctuation.

Improved

Improved version:

In conclusion, it becomes unequivocally apparent that governments should consider augmenting levies on cars. Such an approach could effectively mitigate individuals' susceptibility to a range of predicaments. 

Source: Ms Shraddha 22-08-23  MT 17

Original Text!

  The 21st century has witnessed a significant increase in pollution and traffic problems in modern nations worldwide, but in order to prevent traffic problems government impose tax on private cars. 

This essay will shed some lights on the upsides and downsides behind this statement. 

Overall, a growing number of massed indulged in shaping their lives and fulfilling their matrialistic need by using of their own private vehicles. However, the problem may be mitigated by the implementation of a new restrictions. 

In the present era, if governments impose tax on private cars and use individuals money to improve in public transport. There are many advantages of this. One notable impact is pollution may be reduced by these rules and regulations. In this way environment will save and a significant number of people may not suffer from these problems. 

Pollution has a detrimental effect on the folks. Imposing strict rules can be reduce traffic problems. Traffic congestion have become indisputable problems in contemporary society. 

Moreover, accidents may be reduces. A great many people now travel by only railways and in this way, governments can earn more benefits. 

Turning to its drawbacks, if governments imposed heavily tax on individuals, for instance, it stands out as their rights are taken. People may not travel by their own cars. In addition to, the prevalence of traffic congestion is attributed to people. In today's face-paced world, individuals loss their job and they become jobless because they rely on technology as it rapidly changing and people only have these kinds of jobs such as car repairing. Employment rate may increase.

In conclusion, it is evident that governments should increase tax on cars in this way people may not suffer from any problems.

Corrected!

          The 21st century has witnessed a significant increase in pollution and traffic problems in modern nations worldwide, but in order to prevent traffic problems, governments impose taxes on private cars. This essay will shed some light on the upsides and downsides behind this statement. Overall, a growing number of people indulge in shaping their lives and fulfilling their materialistic needs by using their own private vehicles. However, the problem may be mitigated by the implementation of new restrictions.
                In the present era, if governments impose taxes on private cars and use individuals' money to improve public transport, there are many advantages to this. One notable impact is that pollution may be reduced by these rules and regulations. In this way, the environment will be saved, and a significant number of people may not suffer from these problems.
                 Pollution has a detrimental effect on people. Imposing strict rules can reduce traffic problems. Traffic congestion has become an indisputable problem in contemporary society. Moreover, accidents may be reduced. A great many people now travel only by railways, and in this way, governments can earn more benefits.
                 Turning to its drawbacks, if governments impose heavy taxes on individuals, for instance, it stands out as their rights being taken away. People may not be able to travel by their own cars. In addition, the prevalence of traffic congestion is attributed to people. In today's fast-paced world, individuals may lose their jobs and become unemployed because they rely on technology, which is rapidly changing, and people only have jobs such as car repairing. The employment rate may increase.
                In conclusion, it is evident that governments should increase taxes on cars so that people may not suffer from any problems.

IMPROVED VERSION

   The 21st century has borne witness to a conspicuous upswing in environmental contamination and traffic quandaries in nations worldwide. To address these issues, governments have introduced levies on privately owned vehicles. This essay endeavours to dissect both the affirmative and detrimental facets linked with this measure.

In broad terms, an escalating number of individuals are actively shaping their lives and meeting their materialistic aspirations through their personal cars. The convenience and autonomy these vehicles offer contribute to their popularity. Nonetheless, a pertinent remedy might lie in the embrace of novel regulatory frameworks.

Modern governance stands at the crossroads where implementing taxation on private vehicles could play a transformative role. By allocating citizens' funds towards bolstering public transport infrastructure, numerous benefits could materialise. Moreover, this step would foster a culture of shared transportation, thereby reducing the individual reliance on personal vehicles.

The advantages of such a policy are multifaceted. Notably, imposing stringent rules and regulations could act as a robust antidote to the escalating pollution levels. As a corollary, this would safeguard the environment and alleviate the predicaments faced by a myriad of individuals. For instance, respiratory ailments and chronic health issues arising from pollution could abate substantially.

Conversely, it is imperative to examine potential drawbacks. The imposition of substantial government levies might inadvertently infringe upon individuals' rights. Such levies could deter personal vehicle ownership and constrain citizens' mobility choices. Yet, it is plausible that the long-term benefits could outweigh these initial inconveniences.

In conclusion, the trajectory towards a more sustainable and less congested urban future necessitates serious consideration of enhanced taxation on privately owned cars. This step aligns with the overarching goal of curbing pollution, promoting shared mobility, and ensuring a healthier environment for all. While concerns about individual rights are valid, the potential for positive impact remains undeniable. Striking a balance between personal freedoms and collective well-being remains the crux of this deliberation.

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